National Dex Monotype Volcarona (Fire) [QC: 2/2] [GP:1/1]

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Volcarona @ Heavy-Duty Boots / Psychium Z
Name: Offensive Quiver Dance (Fire)
Ability: Flame Body
EVs: 252 SpA / 4 SpD / 252 Spe
IVs: 0 Atk
Timid Nature
- Quiver Dance
- Flamethrower
- Psychic
- Giga Drain / Bug Buzz

Volcarona is one of the top setup sweepers that Fire has access to, with Quiver Dance allowing it to become a dangerous threat to teams unequipped to deal with it defensively. Quiver Dance allows Volcarona to set up in front of special attackers like Rotom-W under sun and Kyurem. Psychic allows Volcarona to pressure Fighting and Poison teams, especially after one Quiver Dance, which lets Volcarona outspeed and beat Pawmot, Nihilego, and Crobat. Giga Drain allows Volcarona to pressure Water and Ground teams after one Quiver Dance, threatening Tapu Fini, Gastrodon, and Hippowdon. Bug Buzz covers the Psychic and Dark matchups very well and allows it to hit Roaring Moon, Ting-Lu, and Latias, which would otherwise be a challenge to deal with. Heavy-Duty Boots prevents Volcarona from being worn down by Entry Hazards which would otherwise stop Volcarona from being able to set up safely. Psychium Z lets Volcarona OHKO Toxapex with a +1 Shattered Psyche and lets it beat otherwise troubling threats like +1 Kommo-o, Iron Hands, and Clodsire. Blaziken and Mega Charizard X are especially good partners due to their ability to break through special tanks such as Blissey, Clodsire, and Galarian Slowking with relative ease. Entry hazard removers such as Torkoal, Rotom-H, and Court Change Cinderace are near necessities when Volcarona is running Psychium Z. Torkoal and Rotom-H can also provide excellent utility in the form of Stealth Rock and dual screens, respectively, to help Volcarona sweep more easily. Victini and Cinderace can wallbreak for Volcarona due to their power and coverage options like Bolt Strike, High Jump Kick, and Zen Headbutt that can deal with Mantine and Ting-Lu Volcanion is also an excellent partner for Volcarona that, thanks to its Water immunity, can act as a strong pivot into Pokemon like Azumarill and Mantine, which could revenge kill it or clear Quiver Dance boosts with Haze.

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Hi Captainbruh1008, you double posted a thread. I'll delete that WIP thread and stuff (Checks/Edits) will happen here instead. Also, your profile URL is your smogon profile URL. I'll check this analyses in a bit, just posting this so you know what happened to the other thread :3

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Volcarona @ Heavy-Duty Boots / Psychium Z
Name: Offensive Quiver Dance Sweeper (Fire)
Ability: Flame Body
EVs: 252 Spa / 4 SpD/ 252 Spe
IVs: 0 Atk
Timid Nature
- Quiver Dance
- Fiery Dance
- Psychic
- Giga Drain / Bug Buzz

Volcarona is one of the top set-up sweepers that Fire has access to alongside Mega Charizard X having access to Quiver Dance allows it to become a dangerous threat to teams unequipped to deal with its power. Quiver Dance allows Volcarona to set up in front of most Special attackers like Rotom-W under sun, Iron Valiant (Iron valiant can be both, maybe a diff example would be better?), and Kyurem. After setting up one Quiver Dance it has the ability to turn the tables on most Water-types like Urshifu-R and Toxapex with its Psychic to 2HKO Toxapex or OHKO if you (You/2nd Person isnt allowed in analyses, change this) are using Psychium Z which also allows Volcarona to beat otherwise troubling threats like +1 Kommo-o, Glimmora, and Great tTusk (Without psychium, you still beat these guys at +1, unless you want to say its unboosted. In that case, you might want to use another sentence for psychium instead). Giga Drain allows Volcarona to pressure Water after one Quiver Dance which lets Volcarona outspeed and OHKO Choice Scarf Urshifu (You already kill it with Psychic, choose something else) as well as put pressure against Ground-types after a Quiver Dance like Hippodown Hippowdon and Gastrodon. Bug Buzz can allow Volcarona to cover the Psychic and Dark matchups very well and allows it to hit otherwise difficult Pokemon like, Roaring Moon, Slowbro, Latias, and Tyranitar which would otherwise be a challenge to deal with (You still lose to spdef ttar I think, and Psychic should b trying to beat you using Glowking or Victini, not slowbro. PErhaps diff examples would be better. If desired, segway Morning sun here too, although its usually an inferior choice). Volcarona appreciates teammates that can make up for its susceptibility to special tanks Blaziken and Mega Charizard X are especially good partners for their ability to break through special tanks with relative ease such as Blissey, Clodsire and Slowking-G. Volcarona also appreciates Hazard Control from Torkoal and Defog from Rotom-H (Court Change Cinderace/Taunt Heatran) which are near necessities when it's running Psychicium Z. Victini and Cinderace are also great partners for Volcarona with their wall-breaking power and coverage like High Jump Kick, Bolt Strike, and Zen Headbutt.


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Volcarona @ Heavy-Duty Boots/Psychium Z
Name: Offensive Quiver Dance Sweeper (Fire)
Ability: Flame Body
EVs: 252 Spa / 4 SpD/ 252 Spe
IVs: 0 Atk
Timid Nature
- Quiver Dance
- Fiery Dance
- Psychic
- Giga Drain/Bug Buzz

Volcarona is one of the top set-up sweepers that Fire has access to alongside Mega Charizard X having access to Quiver Dance allows it to become a dangerous threat to teams unequipped to deal with its power (oddly phrased sentence, but nothing wrong with the meaning). Quiver Dance allows Volcarona to set up in front of most Special attackers like Rotom-W under sun, Zoroark-H , and Kyurem. After setting up one Quiver Dance it has the ability to turn the tables on most Water-types like Urshifu-R and Toxapex. If Psychium Z is utilized, a +1 Shattered Psyche OHKOs Toxapex, and with its Psychic to 2HKO Toxapex or OHKO if Psychium is being used which also allows Volcarona to beat otherwise troubling threats like +1 Kommo-o, Iron Hands and Clodsire. Giga Drain allows Volcarona to pressure Water and Ground teams after one Quiver Dance, threatening Tapu Fini, Gastrodon, and Hippowdon. which lets Volcarona beat Pelipper and Tapu Fini as well as put pressure against Ground-types after a Quiver Dance like Hippowdon and Gastrodon. Bug Buzz coversan allow Volcarona to cover the Psychic and Dark matchups very well and allows it to hit otherwise difficult Pokemon like, Roaring Moon, Ting Lu , Latias, and Hydregion which would otherwise be a challenge to deal with. Blaziken and Mega Charizard X are especially good partners for their ability to break through special tanks with relative ease such as Blissey, Clodsire and Slowking-G. Volcarona also appreciates (if its a necessity then it shouldnt just appreciate it right?) Entry Hazard Control from Torkoal, Defog from Rotom-H, Court Change Cinderace and Taunt Heatran which are near necessities when it's running Psychicium Z.(period) Victini and Cinderace are also great partners for Volcarona with their wall-breaking power and coverage like High Jump Kick, Bolt Strike, and Zen Headbutt. (Possibly to deal with Mantine/Ting-Lu which give it trouble?)


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Volcarona @ Heavy-Duty Boots/Psychium Z (add space after "Boots" and before "Psychium")
Name: Offensive Quiver Dance Sweeper (Fire)
Ability: Flame Body
EVs: 252 SpA / 4 SpD/ 252 Spe (add space after "SpD")
IVs: 0 Atk
Timid Nature
- Quiver Dance
- Fiery Dance Flamethrower (better move overall, Sp.Atk raise is not worth less PP and power)
- Psychic
- Giga Drain/Bug Buzz (add space after "Drain" and before "Bug")

Volcarona is one of the top set-up sweepers that Fire has access to alongside Mega Charizard X having access to Quiver Dance which allows it to become a dangerous threat to teams unequipped to deal with its power. (Zard X part is unnecessary when this analysis is all about Volcarona) Quiver Dance allows Volcarona to set up in front of special attackers like Rotom-Wash under sun, and Kyurem. After setting up one Quiver Dance it has the ability to turn the tables on most Water-types like Urshifu-R and Toxapex. (this sentence just looks like fluff, not to mention that turning the tables on Pex can only be done with Psychium Z which you explain in the following sentence while Urshifu is a bad example due to CB Aqua Jet) If Psychium Z is utilized, a +1 Shattered Psyche OHKOs Toxapex, and allows Volcarona to beat otherwise troubling threats like +1 Kommo-o, Iron Hands and Clodsire. Giga Drain allows Volcarona to pressure Water and Ground teams after one Quiver Dance, threatening Tapu Fini, Gastrodon, and Hippodwdon. Bug Buzz covers the Psychic and Dark matchups very well and allows it to hit Roaring Moon, Ting-Lu, and Latias, and Hydregion which would otherwise be a challenge to deal with. (you already listed Roaring Moon so Hydreigon isn't necessary to include as well, 3 examples are fine here) Blaziken and Mega Charizard X are especially good partners for their ability to break through special tanks with relative ease such as Blissey, Clodsire, and Slowking-G. Entry hazard control from Torkoal's Rapid Spin, Defog from Rotom-H, and Court Change Cinderace and Taunt Heatran which are near necessities when it's Volcarona is running Psychicium Z. (Taunt Heatran isn't used as hazard control but rather for stallbreaking) Victini and Cinderace are also great partners for Volcarona with their wall-breaking power and coverage like High Jump Kick, Bolt Strike, and Zen Headbutt which deal with Mantine and Ting-Lu. (swapping the placement of HJK and Bolt Strike in this sentence would be more accurate, add Volcanion as a teammate, Fire's sole Water immunity, would also add a sentence talking about utility from Torkoal and Rotom-H in Stealth Rock and screens respectively that help Volcarona sweep easier)


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kid named heavy-duty boots

Volcarona is one of the top set-up sweepers that Fire has access to having access to Quiver Dance which allows it to become a dangerous threat to teams unequipped to deal with its power. Quiver Dance allows Volcarona to set up in front of special attackers like Rotom-Wash under sun, and Kyurem. If Psychium Z is utilized, a +1 Shattered Psyche OHKOs Toxapex, and allows Volcarona to beat otherwise troubling threats like +1 Kommo-o, Iron Hands and Clodsire. Giga Drain allows Volcarona to pressure Water and Ground teams after one Quiver Dance, threatening Tapu Fini, Gastrodon, and Hippowdon. Bug Buzz covers the Psychic and Dark matchups very well and allows it to hit Roaring Moon, Ting-Lu, and Latias, which would otherwise be a challenge to deal with. Blaziken and Mega Charizard X are especially good partners for their ability to break through special tanks with relative ease such as Blissey, Clodsire, and Slowking-G. Entry hazard control from Torkoal's Rapind Spin, Defog from Rotom-Heat, and Court Change Cinderace are near necessities when Volcarona is running Psychium Z. Victini and Cinderace are also great partners for Volcarona with their wall-breaking power and coverage like Bolt Strike, High Jump Kick, and Zen Headbutt which deal with Mantine and Ting-Lu. Volcanion is also an excellent partner for Volcarona with its immunity to Water which acts as a strong pivot into Pokemon like Azumarill Urshifu and Mantine Walking Wake which would revenge kill it or Haze away Quiver Dance boosts. (bad examples since both Urshifu and Wake can easily 2HKO Volcanion with their secondary STAB attacks and Volcanion can't even do much back to Walking Wake while Sludge Bomb Volcanion revenge kills Azu and threatens to poison Mantine) Torkoal and Rotom-Heat in addition to providing hazard removal also provide excellent utility in the form of Stealth Rock and dual screens respectively that help Volcarona sweep easier. (I would move this sentence to after the entry hazard control one)


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Implement everything in the check and you get QC 2/2, nice work

 

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GP Team check please and ty

 

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Captainbruh1008, post: 9602071, member: 610704

Volcarona @ Heavy-Duty Boots / Psychium Z
Name: Offensive Quiver Dance (Fire)
Ability: Flame Body
EVs: 252 SpA / 4 SpD / 252 Spe
IVs: 0 Atk
Timid Nature
- Quiver Dance
- Flamethrower
- Psychic
- Giga Drain / Bug Buzz

Volcarona is one of the top set-up (RH) sweepers that Fire has access to having access to (repetition) , (AC) with Quiver Dance which allows allowing it to become a dangerous threat to teams unequipped to deal with its power. (Do you mean teams that aren't equipped to deal with it defensively here? currently this is pretty fluffy and doesn't give any info that isn't true for any other set up threat, but if thats what you mean with teams that can't handle it on the defensive side and the offensive counterplay gets outsped due to QD then saying "unequipped to deal with it defensively" would work) Quiver Dance allows Volcarona to set up in front of special attackers like Rotom-Wash under sun, (RC) and Kyurem. Giga Drain allows Volcarona to pressure Water and Ground teams after one Quiver Dance, threatening Tapu Fini, Gastrodon, and Hippowdon. Bug Buzz covers the Psychic and Dark matchups very well and allows it to hit Roaring Moon, Ting-Lu and Latias, which would otherwise be a challenge to deal with. If Psychium Z is utilized, a +1 Shattered Psyche OHKOs Toxapex, (wordy) Psychium Z lets Volcarona OHKO Toxapex with a +1 Shattered Psyche and lets it and allows Volcarona to beat otherwise troubling threats like +1 Kommo-o, Iron Hands and Clodsire. (When would you this vs Heavy-Duty Boots on a team?, currently reads like this is what you should always use which goes against the item slash order) Giga Drain allows Volcarona to pressure Water and Ground teams after one Quiver Dance, threatening Tapu Fini, Gastrodon, and Hippowdon. Bug Buzz covers the Psychic and Dark matchups very well and allows it to hit Roaring Moon, Ting-Lu and Latias, which would otherwise be a challenge to deal with. (move descriptions should go before item descriptions like for z-moves, especially since you don't discuss base psychic at all when discussing z-psychic) Blaziken and Mega Charizard X are especially good partners for due to their ability to break through special tanks with relative ease such as Blissey, Clodsire, and Slowking-G Galarian Slowking with relative ease. (Removed space)Entry hazard control removers such as Rapid Spin Torkoal, Defog Rotom-H, from Torkoal's Rapid Spin, Defog from Rotom-Heat, and Court Change Cinderace are near necessities when Volcarona is running Psychium Z. Torkoal and Rotom-Heat in addition to providing Hazard removal (unecessary fluff) can also provide excellent utility in the form of Stealth Rock and dual screens respectively that to help Volcarona sweep easier more easily. Victini and Cinderace are also great partners can wallbreak (repetition of are great partners for each entry, helps add some variety) for Volcaronawith their wall-breaking power and coverage options like Bolt Strike, High Jump Kick, and Zen Headbutt which that can deal with Mantine and Ting Lu. Volcanion is also an excellent partner for Volcarona that, thanks to its Water immunity, can act with its immunity to Water which acts (reads like the immunity to water is what pivots in) as a strong pivot into Pokemon like Azumarill and Matine Mantine which would could revenge kill it or clear Haze away (to haze is not an accepted verb) Quiver Dance boosts with Haze.


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Volcarona @ Heavy-Duty Boots / Psychium Z
Name: Offensive Quiver Dance (Fire)
Ability: Flame Body
EVs: 252 SpA / 4 SpD / 252 Spe
IVs: 0 Atk
Timid Nature
- Quiver Dance
- Flamethrower
- Psychic
- Giga Drain / Bug Buzz

Volcarona is one of the top setup sweepers that Fire has access to, with Quiver Dance allowing it to become a dangerous threat to teams unequipped to deal with it defensively. Quiver Dance allows Volcarona to set up in front of special attackers like Rotom-W under sun and Kyurem. (psychic explanation needs to go here to follow the set order) Giga Drain allows Volcarona to pressure Water and Ground teams after one Quiver Dance, threatening Tapu Fini, Gastrodon, and Hippowdon. Bug Buzz covers the Psychic and Dark matchups very well and allows it to hit Roaring Moon, Ting-Lu, (AC) and Latias, which would otherwise be a challenge to deal with. Psychic allows Volcarona to pressure Fighting and Poison teams, especially after one Quiver Dance, (AC) which lets Volcarona outspeed and beat Pawmot, Nihilego, (AC) and Crobat. (you need to explain heavy duty boots here because its slashed as an item choice - you're onyl saying why run psychium but why run boots?) Psychium Z lets Volcarona OHKO Toxapex with a +1 Shattered Psyche and lets it beat otherwise troubling threats like +1 Kommo-o, Iron Hands, (AC) and Clodsire. Blaziken and Mega Charizard X are especially good partners due to their ability to break through special tanks with relative ease such as Blissey, Clodsire, and Galarian Slowking with relative ease. Entry hazard removers such as Torkoal's Rapid Spin, Defog from Rotom-H, Torkoal, Rotom-H, and Court Change Cinderace are near necessities when Volcarona is running Psychium Z. Torkoal and Rotom-Heat can also provide excellent utility in the form of Stealth Rock and dual screens, (AC) respectively, (AC) to help Volcarona sweep more easily. Victini and Cinderace are can wallbreak for Volcarona with their wall-breaking due to their power and coverage options like Bolt Strike, High Jump Kick, and Zen Headbutt that can deal with Mantine and Ting-Lu (add hyphen). Volcanion is also an excellent partner for Volcarona that, thanks to its Water immunity, can act as a strong pivot into Pokemon like Azumarill and Mantine, (AC) which could revenge kill it or clear Quiver Dance boosts with Haze.

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you missed quite a bit from the above check, mostly commas, so make sure to implement checks by clicking reply to the gp check post, then removing the red / addressing the comments and then deformatting it all and pasting back into the OP. https://www.smogon.com/forums/threa...new-writers-please-read.3588923/#post-7122054 (point 3 here)

 

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changes implemented thank you

 

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