Gen 5 Magneton (GP 1/1)

[Gamer1234556]

[OVERVIEW]
Magneton is able to carve out a small niche in OU thanks to having a higher base Speed stat than Magnezone. Its higher Speed stat lets it, with a Choice Scarf, outspeed +1 Adamant Dragonite, +1 Gyarados, Choice Scarf Tyranitar, Alakazam, and Starmie. This makes Magneton seem appealing to bulkier teams that struggle against them, as Choice Scarf Magnezone gets outsped by the aforementioned Pokemon. Like Magnezone, Magneton is still able to trap Skarmory, Ferrothorn, and Excadrill, though the latter two require it to run Hidden Power Fire.

However, Magneton is outclassed by Magnezone the vast majority of the time by virtue of the latter's ability to better sponge strong attacks like Latios's Draco Meteor, Tyranitar's Superpower, and Dragonite's Outrage. Its ability to trap Ferrothorn and Jirachi is also strictly inferior to its evolution due to Magneton's weaker power. Magnezone also has the benefit of being less one-dimensional than Magneton, as it is able to run an Air Balloon set that better traps Excadrill thanks to its better bulk and power. Outside of this, Magneton is easily punished by common setup sweepers like Garchomp, Landorus-T, and Volcarona after it has revenge killed something. Magneton also lets dangerous Pokemon like Latios, Tyranitar, and Excadrill switch in because of its weaker power.

[SET]
name: Choice Scarf
move 1: Volt Switch
move 2: Hidden Power Fire / Hidden Power Ice
move 3: Thunderbolt
move 4: Flash Cannon / Thunder Wave
item: Choice Scarf
ability: Magnet Pull
nature: Timid
evs: 4 Def / 252 SpA / 252 Spe

[CREDITS]
- Written by: [[Gamer123556, 515642]]
- Quality checked by: [[Ophion, 433215]]
- Grammar checked by: [[dex, 277988]]

 

[Deleted User [433215]]

This higher Speed stat lets it outspeed Dragon Dance-boosted Adamant Dragonite and Gyarados, Choice Scarf Tyranitar, Alakazam, and Starmie with a Choice Scarf, something that Magnezone cannot do.

I'd add they're threats some bulkier teams can often struggle with by "doing and starmie with a choice scarf..." then mention it's something magnezone can't do.

However, Magneton is outclassed by its evolution Magnezone by virtue of the latter's better bulk

Better bulk that lets it do what with more specificity? Mention how it can actually take attacks like Latios' Draco Meteor or Tyranitar's Superpower to give the reader more clarity. Also reword outclassed to say "Magneton is outclassed by Magnezone a vast majority of the time..." since it's still getting an analysis so clearly it has something to make it worth it, even if miniscule.

Its ability to trap Ferrothorn and a full health Excadrill is also strictly inferior to its evolution due to its weaker power.

Add it does this as a result of its better bulk and power giving it more set versatility to run Air Balloon sets while still being a good Pokemon. Also that it more reliably traps Jirachi.

Even outside the Magnezone comparison,

Reword this to "Even outside of Magnezone outclassing it...", it's more professional sounding, which is how analyses should be.

Magneton is super vulnerable when it's locked into a move, leaving it set up fodder to Swords Dance Garchomp, Swords Dance Landorus-T and Flame Charge Heatran as well as an entry point to other dangerous Pokemon such as Excadrill and Mamoswine.

I'd change super vulnerable to "very punishable by other setup sweepers after it's revenge killed something as a result of relatively low power when not hitting super effectively". Also, "leaving it setup fodder for Pokemon like..." is how you should phrase the latter part of the sentence. Change Flame Charge Heatran to Quiver Dance Volcarona. Also, add more stuff that come in on it as a result of its low power beyond Excadrill and Mamoswine, ie Latios, Tyranitar, Reuniclus, Heatran, and Gastrodon.

 

[Gamer1234556]

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[OVERVIEW]
Magneton is able to carve out a small niche in OU thanks to it having a higher base Speed stat than Magnezone. This Its higher Speed stat lets it, (add comma) with a Choice Scarf, (add comma) (avoids ambiguity about what this refers to) outspeed Dragon Dance-boosted +1 Adamant Dragonite, (add comma) and +1 Gyarados, Choice Scarf Tyranitar, Alakazam, and Starmie with a Choice Scarf. This may make makes Magneton seem appealing for to (i understand what you are going for here, but because the "however" part is in the next paragraph, this makes more sense) bulkier teams that struggle against them, (add comma) as Choice Scarf Magnezone gets outsped even with a Choice Scarf by the aforementioned Pokemon. Aside from trapping Skarmory, it can also trap Ferrothorn and weakened Excadrill if it chooses to run Hidden Power Fire Like Magnezone, Magneton is still able to trap Skarmory, Ferrothorn, and Excadrill, though the latter two require it to run Hidden Power Fire.

However, Magneton is outclassed by its evolution Magnezone the vast majority of the time by virtue of the latter's better ability to better sponge strong attacks like Latios's Draco Meteor, Tyranitar's Superpower, (add comma) and Dragonite's Outrage. Its ability to trap Ferrothorn and Jirachi is also strictly inferior to its evolution due to its Magneton's weaker power. Magnezone also has the benefit of being less one-dimensional than Magneton, as it is able to run an Air Balloon sets to that better traps Excadrill thanks to its better bulk and power. Even outside of Magnezone outclassing it Outside of this, Magneton is very punishable easily punished by other common setup sweepers like Garchomp, Landorus-T, and Volcarona (no need to specify the move, you already say they set up) after it has revenge killed something, such as Swords Dance Garchomp, Swords Dance Landorus-T and Quiver Dance Volcarona. Magneton is also the entry point to other lets dangerous Pokemon like Latios, Tyranitar, and Excadrill (you listed a few too many examples, pick the 3 that are the most important to mention and use those.) switch in because of its weaker power, such as Latios, Tyranitar, Excadrill, Heatran, Mamoswine and Reuniclus.

[SET]
name: Choice Scarf
move 1: Volt Switch
move 2: Hidden Power Fire / Hidden Power Ice
move 3: Thunderbolt
move 4: Flash Cannon / Thunder Wave
item: Choice Scarf
ability: Magnet Pull
nature: Timid
evs: 4 Def / 252 SpA / 252 Spe

[CREDITS]
- Written by: [[Gamer123556, 515642]]
- Quality checked by: [[Ophion, 433215]]
- Grammar checked by: [[dex, 277988]]

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