OU Hawlucha

[Rabia]

[SET]
name: super mega death
move 1: Swords Dance
move 2: Acrobatics
move 3: Close Combat
move 4: Sky Attack
item: Power Herb
ability: Unburden
nature: Adamant
evs: 252 Atk / 4 Def / 252 Spe

[SET COMMENTS]
Hawlucha works well on hyper offense teams as a sweeper, with the combination of Unburden and Swords Dance making it difficult to stop when it's set up. Close Combat provides useful coverage for Electric- and Steel-types such as Rotom-H, Zeraora, Corviknight, and Excadrill. Although Sky Attack's primary purpose is to activate Unburden, it also provides a nuke for targets like Toxapex and defensive Clefable at +2. Additionally, its flinch chance can help Hawlucha bypass Toxapex and Reuniclus. An Adamant nature is preferred to Jolly because the extra Speed isn't necessary, and it gives Hawlucha a better chance to OHKO Clefable with +2 Sky Attack.

Other common hyper offense Pokemon include Grimmsnarl and lead Excadrill or Mew. The former provides dual screens support, which makes it easier for Hawlucha to set up, and the latter two supply entry hazards to wear down checks to Hawlucha like Toxapex and Hippowdon. Setup sweepers like Bisharp, Cloyster, and Zeraora are also common sights on hyper offense builds and help wear down shared checks with Hawlucha.

[CREDITS]
- Written by: [[Rabia, 336073]]
- Quality checked by: [[Jordy, 395754], [curiosity, 443485]]
- Grammar checked by: [[The Dutch Plumberjack, 232216]]

 

[Rabia]

prolly ready, added a line about the nature just because this felt rather short otherwise but if other qc think it's not worth keeping then bop

 

[StellaAthena]

252+ Atk Hawlucha Sky Attack vs. 0 HP / 4 Def Aegislash-Shield: 74-87 (28.3 - 33.3%) -- 0% chance to 3HKO

252+ Atk Hawlucha Sky Attack vs. 252 HP / 252+ Def Toxapex: 106-126 (34.8 - 41.4%) -- 68.3% chance to 3HKO after Black Sludge recovery

It seems misleading to refer to this as a “nuke.” Also, Sky Attack can’t OHKO 252 HP Clefable without a swords dance but Clefable can OHKO with Moonblast in return. At +2, Acrobatics (no item) can OHKO Clefable depending on defense investment.

 

[Rabia]

252+ Atk Hawlucha Sky Attack vs. 0 HP / 4 Def Aegislash-Shield: 74-87 (28.3 - 33.3%) -- 0% chance to 3HKO

252+ Atk Hawlucha Sky Attack vs. 252 HP / 252+ Def Toxapex: 106-126 (34.8 - 41.4%) -- 68.3% chance to 3HKO after Black Sludge recovery

It seems misleading to refer to this as a “nuke.” Also, Sky Attack can’t OHKO 252 HP Clefable without a swords dance but Clefable can OHKO with Moonblast in return. At +2, Acrobatics (no item) can OHKO Clefable depending on defense investment.

defensive clef takes a million so it's a fine mention

will note that Sky Attack is nuking these targets mostly at +2 and remove the Aegislash mention given it's not the greatest

 

[Rabia]

jordy gave me the 1/2 on discord for adding the flinch chance of sky attack

 

[Rabia]

2/2 given over the cord

 

[TheArchangle]

Could some alternate EV spreads be considered? Post-unburden, lowering speed EVs to 184 for example only loses you the speed tie with opposing unburded Hawlucha. You would still be faster than scarf Zeroara(not even a thing) so nothing scarfed or at +1 in the metagame is faster. You can then allocate 72HP EVs for some bulk. Not sure how far it gets you, but might help you live a priority attack here and there.

 

[ForgottenOnes]

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Solid writing. There are some very minor comments that just aims to clarify what you mean.

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[SET]
name: super mega death
move 1: Swords Dance
move 2: Acrobatics
move 3: Close Combat
move 4: Sky Attack
item: Power Herb
ability: Unburden
nature: Adamant
evs: 252 Atk / 4 Def / 252 Spe

[SET COMMENTS]
Hawlucha works well on hyper offense teams as a sweeper,(RC) because of with the combination of Unburden and Swords Dance making it difficult to stop when it's set-up. Close Combat provides useful coverage for Electric- and Steel-types such as Rotom-H, Zeraora, Corviknight, and Excadrill (not sure if it's right to include Electric-types here since Fighting isn't super effective against it. It might be confusing). Although Sky Attack's primary purpose is to activate Unburden, it also provides a nuke (you may want to specify what nuke means. OHKO? 2HKO?) for targets like Toxapex and defensive Clefable at +2. Additionally, its flinch chance can help Hawlucha bypass Toxapex and Reuniclus. An Adamant nature is preferred to Jolly because the extra Speed isn't necessary, and it gives Hawlucha a better chance to OHKO Clefable with +2 Sky Attack.

Other common hyper offense members include Grimmsnarl and lead Excadrill or Mew. The former provides dual screens support, which makes it easier for Hawlucha to set up, and the latter two supply entry hazards to wear down checks to Hawlucha like Toxapex and Hippowdon. Setup sweepers like Bisharp, Cloyster, and Zeraora are also common sights on hyper offense builds and help wear down shared checks with Hawlucha.

[CREDITS]
- Written by: [[Rabia, 336073]]
- Quality checked by: [[Jordy, 395754], [curiosity, 443485]]
- Grammar checked by: [[username1, userid1]]

 

[Rabia]

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Solid writing. There are some very minor comments that just aims to clarify what you mean.

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[SET]
name: super mega death
move 1: Swords Dance
move 2: Acrobatics
move 3: Close Combat
move 4: Sky Attack
item: Power Herb
ability: Unburden
nature: Adamant
evs: 252 Atk / 4 Def / 252 Spe

[SET COMMENTS]
Hawlucha works well on hyper offense teams as a sweeper,(RC) because of with the combination of Unburden and Swords Dance making it difficult to stop when it's set-up. Close Combat provides useful coverage for Electric- and Steel-types such as Rotom-H, Zeraora, Corviknight, and Excadrill (not sure if it's right to include Electric-types here since Fighting isn't super effective against it. It might be confusing). Although Sky Attack's primary purpose is to activate Unburden, it also provides a nuke (you may want to specify what nuke means. OHKO? 2HKO?) for targets like Toxapex and defensive Clefable at +2. Additionally, its flinch chance can help Hawlucha bypass Toxapex and Reuniclus. An Adamant nature is preferred to Jolly because the extra Speed isn't necessary, and it gives Hawlucha a better chance to OHKO Clefable with +2 Sky Attack.

Other common hyper offense members include Grimmsnarl and lead Excadrill or Mew. The former provides dual screens support, which makes it easier for Hawlucha to set up, and the latter two supply entry hazards to wear down checks to Hawlucha like Toxapex and Hippowdon. Setup sweepers like Bisharp, Cloyster, and Zeraora are also common sights on hyper offense builds and help wear down shared checks with Hawlucha.

[CREDITS]
- Written by: [[Rabia, 336073]]
- Quality checked by: [[Jordy, 395754], [curiosity, 443485]]
- Grammar checked by: [[username1, userid1]]

will comment on these changes because I'm in a GP drought rn but still feel obligated to justify my own writing

idt your first changes really do much that's objective here; ", with +gerund" is fine notation and communicates the same meaning as your change just as well imo

it's good to include the Electric-types there because they resist Flying; they would otherwise be solid Hawlucha checks

because Sky Attack is a single-use move for all intents and purposes here, I think it's fine to just call it a "nuke" and not worry about noting if it's an xHKO against some pokemon.

hope these clarifications are helpful for you, feel free to let me know over gp discord if you have any further questions :)

 

[Lumari]

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[SET]
name: super mega death (insert serious set name)
move 1: Swords Dance
move 2: Acrobatics
move 3: Close Combat
move 4: Sky Attack
item: Power Herb
ability: Unburden
nature: Adamant
evs: 252 Atk / 4 Def / 252 Spe

[SET COMMENTS]
Hawlucha works well on hyper offense teams as a sweeper, with the combination of Unburden and Swords Dance making it difficult to stop when it's set up. (RH) Close Combat provides useful coverage for Electric- and Steel-types such as Rotom-H, Zeraora, Corviknight, and Excadrill. Although Sky Attack's primary purpose is to activate Unburden, it also provides a nuke for targets like Toxapex and defensive Clefable at +2. Additionally, its flinch chance can help Hawlucha bypass Toxapex and Reuniclus. An Adamant nature is preferred to Jolly because the extra Speed isn't necessary, and it gives Hawlucha a better chance to OHKO Clefable with +2 Sky Attack.

Other common hyper offense members Pokemon include Grimmsnarl and lead Excadrill or Mew. The former provides dual screens support, which makes it easier for Hawlucha to set up, and the latter two supply entry hazards to wear down checks to Hawlucha like Toxapex and Hippowdon. Setup sweepers like Bisharp, Cloyster, and Zeraora are also common sights on hyper offense builds and help wear down shared checks with Hawlucha.

[CREDITS]
- Written by: [[Rabia, 336073]]
- Quality checked by: [[Jordy, 395754], [curiosity, 443485]]
- Grammar checked by: [[username1, userid1]]

 

[Rabia]

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[SET]
name: super mega death (insert serious set name)
move 1: Swords Dance
move 2: Acrobatics
move 3: Close Combat
move 4: Sky Attack
item: Power Herb
ability: Unburden
nature: Adamant
evs: 252 Atk / 4 Def / 252 Spe

[SET COMMENTS]
Hawlucha works well on hyper offense teams as a sweeper, with the combination of Unburden and Swords Dance making it difficult to stop when it's set up. (RH) Close Combat provides useful coverage for Electric- and Steel-types such as Rotom-H, Zeraora, Corviknight, and Excadrill. Although Sky Attack's primary purpose is to activate Unburden, it also provides a nuke for targets like Toxapex and defensive Clefable at +2. Additionally, its flinch chance can help Hawlucha bypass Toxapex and Reuniclus. An Adamant nature is preferred to Jolly because the extra Speed isn't necessary, and it gives Hawlucha a better chance to OHKO Clefable with +2 Sky Attack.

Other common hyper offense members Pokemon include Grimmsnarl and lead Excadrill or Mew. The former provides dual screens support, which makes it easier for Hawlucha to set up, and the latter two supply entry hazards to wear down checks to Hawlucha like Toxapex and Hippowdon. Setup sweepers like Bisharp, Cloyster, and Zeraora are also common sights on hyper offense builds and help wear down shared checks with Hawlucha.

[CREDITS]
- Written by: [[Rabia, 336073]]
- Quality checked by: [[Jordy, 395754], [curiosity, 443485]]
- Grammar checked by: [[username1, userid1]]

bold of you to assume that's not a serious set name