RU Dragon Dance Tyrantrum

[Shandeur]

[SET]
name: Dragon Dance
move 1: Dragon Dance
move 2: Head Smash
move 3: Scale Shot
move 4: Close Combat / Earthquake
item: Lum Berry / Life Orb
ability: Rock Head
nature: Jolly
evs: 252 Atk / 4 SpD / 252 Spe

[SET COMMENTS]

Head Smash is a recoil-free STAB attack thanks to Rock Head that hits many targets quite hard when boosted. Scale Shot provides a way to boost past Choice Scarf users while dealing damage for when Tyrantrum cannot use Dragon Dance twice. Close Combat is coverage to hit Steel-types and Rhyperior. Earthquake is an option for hitting Metagross super effectively, but it misses out on some Steel-types like Bronzong. Lum Berry is able to cure a status condition once, such as paralysis from Klefki or a burn from Galarian Weezing, or let Tyrantrum set up on a Scald user, such as Milotic. Life Orb is another option to directly help Tyrantrum break past bulkier Pokemon such as Milotic. A Jolly nature is used to make sure Tyrantrum outspeeds as many foes as possible after a Dragon Dance, such as Noivern, Starmie, Raikou, and Aerodactyl.

Dragon Dance Tyrantrum fits onto offensive team structures due to its ability to act as a wincon. Offensive Pokemon such as Sharpedo and Nasty Plot Celebi that share checks with Tyrantrum make good partners, helping pressure and remove these checks for it to clean up late-game. Roserade can use Spikes to wear down Tyrantrum's checks, such as Registeel and Milotic. Wallbreakers such as Lucario, Mimikyu, and Nasty Plot Togekiss can help break down walls like the aforementioned Registeel and Milotic, as well as Umbreon, for Tyrantrum to clean up opposing teams. Checks to Choice Scarf users like Gardevoir, Heracross, and Flygon can help Tyrantrum clean up without being revenge killed. Pokemon such as Heracross and Flygon that pressure Steel- and Rock-types like Steelix and Rhyperior also help greatly.

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[Shandeur]

Ready for QC

 

[Yourwelcomethanku]

Hello. The formatting of the analysis isn't appropriate for either a mini or a full, since it's closer to a mini I'll go with that. This analysis is kind of mixed weirdly, in many places the content isn't well articulated. By isn't well articulated I mean stuff like saying "giving it many opportunities to threaten things out to set up" you don't actually give examples of what important things it gets opportunities on.

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Dragon Dance Tyrantrum a terrific(Probably overselling it, it's like B on the VR) late game cleaner and wallbreaker due to a high attack stat and good typing, giving it many opportunities to threaten things out to set up.(what "things"?) Tyrantrum is also hard to revenge kill due to its typing providing resistances to common priority, such as Lucario's Extreme Speed.(Minis have no overview which is what I imagine this was supposed to be. We just introduce the Pokemon in the first paragraph instead. We should also go over both negatives and positives of a Pokemon. Instead of "hard to revenge kill" because I don't think that's really true. You could mention how it's slower than every common Choice Scarf user even after Dragon Dance and common fat mons like Rhyperior and Metagross can check it)

[SET]
name: Dragon Dance
move 1: Dragon Dance
move 2: Head Smash
move 3: Scale Shot
move 4: Close Combat / Earthquake
item: Lum Berry / Life Orb
ability: Rock Head
nature: Jolly
evs: 252 Atk / 4 SpDef / 252 Spe

[SET COMMENTS]

Paragraph 1
Dragon Dance boosts Tyrantrum's Attack and Speed, giving it a way to clean up weakened teams with ease.(This will likely become redundant) Head Smash is a recoil-free STAB Attack that hits many targets quite hard when boosted. Scale Shot provides another speedboosting option for Tyrantrum.(Really, the big thing about Scale Shot is dealing with Choice Scarf users, You cannot always afford to Dragon Dance twice, so Scale Shot lets you deal damage and outpace Choice Scarf users.) Close Combat is coverage to hit Steel types such as Registeel, and Pokemon that don't take a lot of damage from Tyrantrum's attacks, such as Rhyperior.(why not just Steel-types and Rhyperior?) Earthquake is an option for hitting Metagross super-effectively whilst providing Rock-type and Ground-type Coverage.(Not really important to mention) Lum Berry is able to cure a status condition once, Klefki's Thunder Wave, or a Will-O Wisp from Galarian Weezing.(Another big thing is taking Scald burns.) Life Orb is another option to give Tyrantrum even more power.("even more power" doesn't do a good job at telling a reader what Life Orb is good for, it obviously provides more power. With Life Orb and Dragon Dance you can OHKO bulky Pokemon like Umbreon and Milotic, as well Registeel after Stealth Rock A Jolly Nature is used to make sure Tyrantrum outspeeds as many things as possible after a Dragon Dance. (Jolly is important to outpace various faster Pokemon like Noivern, Starmie, Raikou, and Aerodactyl.)

Paragraph 2
Dragon Dance Tyrantrum fits onto Offensive Team Structures due to its ability to act as a win condition for its team. Tyrantrum enjoys Ground-types being removed for it to clean up in the late game, thus Offensive Pokemon such as Sharpedo and Nasty Plot Celebi make good partners.(What Ground-types? Stuff like Rhyperior doesn't want to be in against Celebi and Sharpedo, generally, while stuff like Steelix, Seis, and Gastro is more appropriate, still not the best examples cause and gastro has Recover and seis is on its own not that relevant. However, they can weaken shared checks for Tyrantrum like Registeel and the Seismitoad from earlier, and Celebi checks Water-types ) Roserade's typing mixes well with Tyrantrum's typing, can use Sleep Powder to give Tyrantrum an opportunity to set up,(How do their typings mix well? And remove the Sleep Powder bit, Roserade commonly isn't Sleep Powder) and can use Spikes to wear down Tyrantrum's checks. Wallbreakers such as Lucario, Mimikyu, and Nasty Plot Togekiss can help break down walls (like?) for Tyrantrum to clean up opposing teams.

(Mention checks to Choice Scarf users ie garde, cross, and flygon, and Steel- and Rock-types like rhyp and meta.)


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[Shandeur]

Checks have been implemented.

 

[Aqua Jet]

AMQC Check - The Tyrant of NU

Dragon Dance Tyrantrum is a good late game cleaner and wallbreaker due to a high attack stat and good typing, giving it many opportunities to threaten things (like?) out to set up. However, Tyrantrum is generally slower than many Choice Scarf users, even at +1, and defensive Pokemon (like?) can keep it in check.


[SET]
name: Dragon Dance
move 1: Dragon Dance
move 2: Head Smash
move 3: Scale Shot
move 4: Close Combat / Earthquake
item: Lum Berry / Life Orb
ability: Rock Head
nature: Jolly
evs: 252 Atk / 4 SpDef / 252 Spe

[SET COMMENTS]

Head Smash is a recoil-free STAB Attack that hits many targets (like?) quite hard when boosted. Scale Shot provides a way to boost past Choice Scarf users (like?) whilst dealing damage. Close Combat is coverage to hit Steel-types (add hyphen) and Rhyperior. Earthquake is an option for hitting Metagross(add Raikou, since otherwise you'd have to rely on Head Smash which may miss) super-effectively. Lum Berry is the preferred item because it allows Tyrantrum to bypass status from foes such as Klefki, Galarian Weezing, and Vaporeon) Lum Berry is able to cure a status condition once, Klefki's Thunder Wave, a Will-O Wisp from Galarian Weezing, or a Scald burn. Alternatively, Life Orb is another option to give Tyrantrum a way to break past bulkier Pokemon such as Milotic. A Jolly Nature is used to make sure Tyrantrum outspeeds as many things as possible after a Dragon Dance, such as Noivern, Starmie, Raikou, (AC) and Aerodactyl.

Dragon Dance Tyrantrum fits onto offensive team structures due to its ability to act as a win condition for its team. Tyrantrum enjoys its checks being removed for it to clean up in the late game, thus offensive teammates Pokemon such as Sharpedo and Nasty Plot Celebi that share checks with it such as Sharpedo and Nasty Plot Celebi make good partners. Roserade is a good partner, as it can use Spikes to wear down Tyrantrum's checks, such as Registeel and Milotic. Wallbreakers such as Lucario, Mimikyu, and Nasty Plot Togekiss can help break down walls like the aforementioned Registeel and Milotic, as well as Umbreon for Tyrantrum to clean up opposing teams. Checks to Choice Scarf users like Gardevoir, Heracross, and Flygon can be appreciated to help Tyrantrum clean up without being revenge killed (give examples of these checks). Pokemon (like?) that pressure Steel and Rock types are also greatly appreciated.


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[Yourwelcomethanku]

I did want to qc this sometime this week and I said that about a week ago, so sorry Aqua Jet to be so quick on this, your check is mostly good and I took a little from it, though I've procrastinated this long enough

I still want one last look at this after it's implemented Shandeur this can mostly be summed up as, articulate better like I said last time. Tell me exactly what defensive Pokemon check it etc. Don't leave the reader with what? or how? questions. And while my last check was rushed and didn't completely make sense, I do think you can take more time and effort to properly implement this.

Ttrum

Dragon Dance Tyrantrum is a good late game cleaner and wallbreaker due to a high attack stat, powerful Head Smash, and good useful defensive typing, (A lot of ttrum's power is in Head Smash and I think the typing part is more aptly worded.)giving it many opportunities to threaten things out to set up. However, Tyrantrum is generally slower than many Choice Scarf users, even at +1, and defensive Pokemon can keep it in check.(Again there's no overview, so merge this with the first paragraph. Elaborate specifically on what gives it opportunities, what choice scarf users, and what defensive Pokemon?)

[SET]
name: Dragon Dance
move 1: Dragon Dance
move 2: Head Smash
move 3: Scale Shot
move 4: Close Combat / Earthquake
item: Lum Berry / Life Orb
ability: Rock Head
nature: Jolly
evs: 252 Atk / 4 SpDef / 252 Spe

[SET COMMENTS]

Head Smash is a recoil-free STAB Attack that hits many targets quite hard when boosted. Scale Shot provides a way to outspeed boost past Choice Scarf users whilst dealing damage for when Tyrantrum cannot afford to Dragon Dance twice. (I think this helps make it more clear)Close Combat is coverage to hit Steel-types and Rhyperior. Earthquake is an option for hitting Metagross super-effectively. Lum Berry is able to cure a status condition once, Klefki's Thunder Wave, a Will-O Wisp from Galarian Weezing, or a Scald burn. Life Orb is another option to give Tyrantrum a way to break past bulkier Pokemon such as Milotic.(In terms of some more specific things it lets you OHKO Milotic and Umbreon at +1, as well spd regi with stealth rock A Jolly Nature is used to make sure Tyrantrum outspeeds as many things as possible after a Dragon Dance, such as Noivern, Starmie, Raikou and Aerodactyl. (Give Shuca Berry and Chople Berry mentions. Shuca Berry is helpful for breaking past Rhyperior and Steelix, and forcing Choice Scarf Flygon to lock into Outrage for a successful revenge kill. Chople Berry helps muscle past Bewear and Body Press Registeel.


Dragon Dance Tyrantrum fits onto Offensive Team Structures due to its ability to act as a win condition for its team. Tyrantrum enjoys its checks being removed for it to clean up in the late game, thus Offensive Pokemon such as Sharpedo and Nasty Plot Celebi that share checks make good partners. (What checks being weakened?) Roserade is a good partner, as it can use Spikes to wear down Tyrantrum's checks, such as Registeel and Milotic. (Klefki and Golisopod good Spikes setters too) Wallbreakers such as Lucario, Mimikyu, and Nasty Plot Togekiss can help break down walls like the aforementioned Registeel and Milotic, as well as Umbreon for Tyrantrum to clean up opposing teams.(Umbreon isn't really a big problem to Tyrantrum in the first place, nor are mmq, togekiss, or lucario that good at weakening it) Checks to Choice Scarf users like Gardevoir, Heracross, and Flygon can be appreciated to help Tyrantrum clean up without being revenge killed.(What checks?) Pokemon that pressure Steel and Rock types are also greatly appreciated.(What Pokemon?)


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[zizalith]

Dragon Dance Tyrantrum is a good late game cleaner and wallbreaker due to a high attack stat and good typing, giving it many opportunities to threaten things out to set up. However, Tyrantrum is generally slower than many Choice Scarf users, even at +1, and defensive Pokemon can keep it in check.

single sets don't need an overview, remove this

or a Scald burn

"lets you set up on a scald user such as milotic" or whatever u wanna use

Offensive Team Structures

no capitalization

nice work, qc 2/2

 

[Shandeur]

Checks Implemented, GP Team

 

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[SET]
name: Dragon Dance
move 1: Dragon Dance
move 2: Head Smash
move 3: Scale Shot
move 4: Close Combat / Earthquake
item: Lum Berry / Life Orb
ability: Rock Head
nature: Jolly
evs: 252 Atk / 4 SpDef / 252 Spe

[SET COMMENTS]

Head Smash is a recoil-free STAB Attack attack thanks to Rock Head that hits many targets quite hard when boosted. Scale Shot provides a way to boost past Choice Scarf users whilst while dealing damage for when Tyrantrum cannot use Dragon Dance twice. Close Combat is coverage to hit Steel-types (added hyphen) and Rhyperior. Earthquake is an option for hitting Metagross super-effectively super effectively, but it misses out on some Steel-types. (give an example-i assume this makes sense? if like power is the issue, pls specify that instead) Lum Berry is able to cure a status condition once, Klefki's Thunder Wave, a Will-O Wisp from Galarian Weezing, or lets you set up on a scald such as paralysis from Klefki or a burn from Galarian Weezing, or let Tyrantrum set up on a Scald user, such as Milotic. Life Orb is another option to give Tyrantrum a way to directly help Tyrantrum break past bulkier Pokemon such as Milotic. A Jolly Nature nature is used to make sure Tyrantrum outspeeds as many things foes as possible after a Dragon Dance, such as Noivern, Starmie, Raikou, (AC) and Aerodactyl. (removed extra linebreak under)

Dragon Dance Tyrantrum fits onto offensive team structures due to its ability to act as a win condition for its team. Tyrantrum enjoys its checks being removed for it to clean up in the late game, thus offensive wincon. Offensive Pokemon such as Sharpedo and Nasty Plot Celebi that share checks with Tyrantrum make good partners, helping pressure and remove these checks for it to clean up late-game. Roserade is a good partner, as it can use Spikes to wear down Tyrantrum's checks, such as Registeel and Milotic. Wallbreakers such as Lucario, Mimikyu, and Nasty Plot Togekiss can help break down walls like the aforementioned Registeel and Milotic, as well as Umbreon, (AC) for Tyrantrum to clean up opposing teams. Checks to Choice Scarf users like Gardevoir, Heracross, and Flygon can be appreciated to help Tyrantrum clean up without being revenge killed. (give an example or two) Pokemon that pressure Steel and Rock types are also greatly appreciated. Steel- and Rock-types also help greatly. (give an example or two) (removed extra linebreak under)

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can proceed as 1/1
GP Team done