Copyediting Substitute+Dragon Dance Tyranitar [GP: 0/1]

[Mossy Sandwich]

[SET]
name: Dragon Dance
move 1: Dragon Dance
move 2: Substitute / Taunt
move 3: Stone Edge
move 4: Earthquake
item: Leftovers
ability: Sand Stream
nature: Jolly
evs: 252 Atk / 4 SpD / 252 Spe
tera type: Flying

[SET COMMENTS]

Dragon Dance Tyranitar attempts to sweep using its bulk, especially its high Special Defense in sand to find setup opportunities against special attackers such as Noivern, Salamence, and choice-locked Gengar. Earthquake takes out Rock resistances such as Tinkaton or Sandy Shocks. Substitute allows Tyranitar to strengthen its advantage when granted free turns, making it even more difficult to take out especially with Leftovers keeping it healthy. It also protects it against certain status moves, notably Will-O-Wisp from Talonflame and Paldean Tauros-F as well as Toxic from Quagsire. It also provides it with protection against priority moves from Scizor and Slither Wing to remove the need to Terastallize versus them. Taunt can be used over Substitute to shut down defensive pokemon that would otherwise prevent Tyranitar from sweeping such as Roar Hippowdon, while still beating Quagsire. Tera Flying allows Tyranitar to beat Quagsire and, if running Taunt, Hippowdon, while removing its weakness to priority based revenge killers such as Slither Wing and Scizor. It can also let it gain potential set up opportunities and generate 50-50s versus Pokemon like Decidueye, Gastrodon and Pawmot. A Jolly nature ensures Tyranitar can outspeed Gengar, Pawmot, and Sandy Shocks at +1.

Dragon Dance Tyranitar can fit on a variety of teams which can range from Hyper Offense to Semi-Stall. It generally struggles to make progress against bulky Ground-types as Hippowdon can force it out with Roar or threaten it with Stone Edge while Quagsire can PP stall it if healthy. Since Iron Defense+Body Press Slowbro is also a problem for it, Tyranitar appreciates support from Grass-types such as Decideueye or Rotom-C. Rotom-C and Decidueye can also bring Tyranitar in on Pokemon such as Noivern and Salamence for set up opportunities. Entry hazard setters such as Sandy Shocks and Gastrodon can help wear down checks such as Wo-Chien for Tyranitar. Sandy Shocks can also provide Tyranitar with set up opportunities against Pokemon like Decideueye while Gastrodon can provide a secondary check to Pokemon like Salamence and Gengar to help preserve Tyranitar's HP for it to sweep better. Sandy Shocks can also potentially Tera Ice to wear down and pressure Rest Talk Wo-Chien for Tyranitar. Scream Tail can provide Tyranitar with Wish support to more consistently check such Pokemon, and can deal with Pokemon such as Bulk Up Quaquaval and Paldean Tauros-A that might try to set up against Tyranitar. Wallbreakers such as Paldean Tauros-A and Gengar can wear down checks to Tyranitar like Wo-Chien and Hippowdon. On Hyper Offense teams, Dual Screens setters like Grimmsnarl or Psyterrain setters such as Indeedee-M can support Tyranitar with set up opportunities or the negation of revenge killers, while Indeedee-M can also provide Healing Wish support.

 

[Estarossa]

Could you get this into QC within 72 hours please? Let me know if there is any reason you need an extension on this, will reassign after 72 hours otherwise.

 

[Sulo]

broken

[SET]
name: Dragon Dance
move 1: Dragon Dance
move 2: Substitute /Taunt
move 3: Stone Edge
move 4: Earthquake
item: Leftovers
ability: Sand Stream
nature: Jolly
evs: 252 Atk / 4 Spd / 252 Spe
tera type: Flying

[SET COMMENTS]

Dragon Dance Tyranitar attempts to sweep using its bulk, especially its high Special Defense in sand to find setup opportunities against special attackers such as Noivern, special-attacking Salamence, and choice-locked Gengar. After an initial Dragon Dance, it can Terastallize, becoming a Flying-type and allowing it to boost further against pokemon that could otherwise check it such as Slither Wing or Tsareena. move this down and reword to something like "Tera Flying allows Tyranitar to..." Earthquake takes out Rock resistances such as Tinkaton or Sandy Shocks. Substitute allows Tyranitar to strengthen its advantage when granted free turns, making it even more difficult to take out especially with Leftovers keeping it healthy. It also protects it against certain status moves, notably Will-O-Wisp from Talonflame and Paldean Tauros-F as well as Toxic from Quagsire. Taunt can be used over Substitute to shut down defensive pokemon that would otherwise prevent Tyranitar from sweeping such as Roar Hippowdon. A Jolly nature ensures Tyranitar can outspeed Gengar, Pawmot, and Sandy Shocks after a dance. "Dragon Dance", or just say "at +1"

mention what team styles it fits on here instead of at the end Dragon Dance Tyranitar generally struggles to make progress against bulky Ground-types as Hippowdon can force it out with Roar or threaten it with Stone Edge while Quagsire can PP stall it if healthy. Since Iron Defense+Body Press Slowbro is also a problem for it, Tyranitar appreciates support from Grass types such as Tsareena or Rotom-Mow. On the other hand, many teams appreciate being able to fall back on Tyranitar to take on special attackers such as Iron Jugulis or Kilowattrel. think noivern is a better example? at least more meta relevant in my eyes Teams that struggle with Fighting-, Ground-, or Grass-types such as the aforementioned Slither Wing and Sandy Shocks also enjoy being able to lure and turn the tables on them with Tyranitar's Tera type. In general, Dragon Dance Tyranitar can fit on a variety of teams that are looking for a setup sweeper and some extra defensive utility which can range from Hyper Offense to Semi-Stall. see above.

[CREDITS]
- Written by: [[Mossy Sandwich, 519233]]
- Quality checked by: [[Sulo, 528036], [username2, userid2]]
- Grammar checked by: [[username1, userid1]]

just some reorganizing for the most part, 1/2!

 

[Mossy Sandwich]

Implemented and ready for second QC

 

[Twilight]

Mossy Sandwich, post: 9536122, member: 519233

[SET]
name: Dragon Dance
move 1: Dragon Dance
move 2: Substitute / (Space)Taunt
move 3: Stone Edge
move 4: Earthquake
item: Leftovers
ability: Sand Stream
nature: Jolly
evs: 252 Atk / 4 SpD / 252 Spe
tera type: Flying

[SET COMMENTS]

Dragon Dance Tyranitar attempts to sweep using its bulk, especially its high Special Defense in sand to find setup opportunities against special attackers such as Noivern, special-attacking Salamence, and choice-locked Gengar. Earthquake takes out Rock resistances such as Tinkaton or Sandy Shocks. Substitute allows Tyranitar to strengthen its advantage when granted free turns, making it even more difficult to take out especially with Leftovers keeping it healthy. It also protects it against certain status moves, notably Will-O-Wisp from Talonflame and Paldean Tauros-F as well as Toxic from Quagsire. Fit in protecting vs priority somewhere as it means you don't have to commit Tera against Scizor, Slither Wing, etc. Taunt can be used over Substitute to shut down defensive pokemon that would otherwise prevent Tyranitar from sweeping such as Roar Hippowdon. Tera Flying allows Tyranitar to prevent revenge-killing from Fighting and Bug types such as Slither Wing and Tsareena Tsareena is neither a Fighting or Bug-type and can even turn them into further setup opportunities. A Jolly nature ensures Tyranitar can outspeed Gengar, Pawmot, and Sandy Shocks at +1.

Dragon Dance Tyranitar can fit on a variety of teams which can range from Hyper Offense to Semi-Stall. It generally struggles to make progress against bulky Ground-types as Hippowdon can force it out with Roar or threaten it with Stone Edge while Quagsire can PP stall it if healthy. Since Iron Defense+Body Press Slowbro is also a problem for it, Tyranitar appreciates support from Grass-types such as Tsareena or Rotom-C. On the other hand, many teams appreciate being able to fall back on Tyranitar to take on special attackers such as Iron Jugulis or Noivern. This just doesn't read right to me and seems very out of place. Are you trying to say these Grass-types appreciate Ttar checking these two for them? If not then remove it because it's just fluff that doesn't belong in team options. Teams that struggle with Fighting-, Ground-, or Grass-types such as the aforementioned Slither Wing and Sandy Shocks also enjoy being able to lure and turn the tables on them with Tyranitar's Tera type. Not a fan of this type-chart writing and would suggest avoiding it tbh. You could apply this for literally every type weakness Tyranitar sheds by using Tera to potentially surprise KO something. Stuff like this is best suited for the first para when describing why you run it, which you have already done.

Add hazard setters like Sandy and Gastrodon (example Bisharp dies to +1 EQ after a Spike)
Screen setters can ensure multiple setup turns
Mention some wallbreakers/other setup mons that make it easier for Ttar to clean
[CREDITS]
- Written by: [[Mossy Sandwich, 519233]]
- Quality checked by: [[Sulo, 528036], [username2, userid2]]
- Grammar checked by: [[username1, userid1]]

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[Estarossa]

reminder to implement Twi's qc check here

 

[Estarossa]

implemented Twi's qc check here and did a quick update to current metagame, should be good for GP.

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[YashGreninja]

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[SET]
name: Dragon Dance
move 1: Dragon Dance
move 2: Substitute / Taunt
move 3: Stone Edge
move 4: Earthquake
item: Leftovers
ability: Sand Stream
nature: Jolly
evs: 252 Atk / 4 SpD / 252 Spe
tera type: Flying

[SET COMMENTS]

Dragon Dance Tyranitar attempts to sweep using can sweep by leveraging its bulk, especially particularly its high Special Defense in sand to find setup opportunities against special attackers such as Noivern, Salamence, and choice-locked Gengar. Earthquake takes out Rock resistances Rock-resistant foes such as Tinkaton or Sandy Shocks. Substitute allows provides Tyranitar cover to strengthen its advantage when granted free turns, making it even more difficult to take out, (add comma) especially with Leftovers keeping it healthy. It also protects it against certain status moves, notably Will-O-Wisp from Talonflame and Paldean Tauros-F as well as Toxic from Quagsire. It also provides it Tyranitar with protection against priority moves from Scizor and Slither Wing to remove the need to Terastallize versus them. Taunt can be used over Substitute to shut down defensive pokemon Pokemon that would otherwise prevent Tyranitar from sweeping such as Roar Hippowdon, while still beating Quagsire. Tera Flying allows Tyranitar to beat beats Quagsire and, if running Taunt, Hippowdon, while removing its weakness to priority based revenge killers priority users such as Slither Wing and Scizor. It can also let it Tyranitar gain potential set up opportunities and generate 50-50s versus Pokemon like Decidueye, Gastrodon, (add comma) and Pawmot. A Jolly nature ensures Tyranitar can outspeed Gengar, Pawmot, and Sandy Shocks at +1.

Dragon Dance Tyranitar can fit fits on a variety of teams which can range from Hyper Offense to Semi-Stall hyper offense to semi-stall. It generally struggles to make progress against bulky Ground-types as Hippowdon can force it out with Roar or threaten it with Stone Edge while Quagsire can PP stall it if healthy. Since Iron Defense + Body Press (add spaces between the moves and the + sign) Slowbro is also a problem for it, Tyranitar appreciates support from Grass-types such as Decideueye Decidueye or Rotom-C. Rotom-C and Decidueye can also bring Tyranitar in on Pokemon such as Noivern and Salamence for set up opportunities. Entry hazard setters such as Sandy Shocks and Gastrodon can help wear down Tyranitar's checks such as like Wo-Chien for Tyranitar. Sandy Shocks can also provide Tyranitar with set up opportunities against Pokemon like Decideueye Decidueye, (add comma) while Gastrodon can provide a secondary check to Pokemon like Salamence and Gengar to help preserve Tyranitar's HP for it to sweep better. Sandy Shocks can also potentially use Tera Ice to wear down and pressure Rest Talk RestTalk Wo-Chien for Tyranitar. Scream Tail can provide Tyranitar with Wish support to more consistently check such Pokemon, and can deal with Pokemon such as Bulk Up Quaquaval and Paldean Tauros-A Tauros-W that might try to set up against Tyranitar. Wallbreakers such as Paldean Tauros-A Tauros-W and Gengar can wear down checks to Tyranitar like Wo-Chien and Hippowdon. On Hyper Offense hyper offense teams, Dual Screens dual screens setters like Grimmsnarl or Psyterrain Psychic Terrain setters such as Indeedee-M can support Tyranitar with set up opportunities or the negation of and negate revenge killers, while Indeedee-M can also provide Healing Wish support.

 

[YashGreninja]

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[SET]
name: Dragon Dance
move 1: Dragon Dance
move 2: Substitute / Taunt
move 3: Stone Edge
move 4: Earthquake
item: Leftovers
ability: Sand Stream
nature: Jolly
evs: 252 Atk / 4 SpD / 252 Spe
tera type: Flying

[SET COMMENTS]
Dragon Dance Tyranitar attempts to sweep using can sweep by leveraging (keep this if you want, up to you) its bulk, especially particularly its high Special Defense in sand to find setup opportunities against special attackers such as Noivern, Salamence, and choice-locked Choice-locked Gengar. Earthquake takes out Rock resistances Rock-resistant foes such as Tinkaton or and Sandy Shocks. Substitute allows provides Tyranitar cover (again, this is optionalti implement) to strengthen its advantage when granted free turns, making it even more difficult to take out, (add comma) especially with Leftovers keeping it healthy. It also protects it Tyranitar against certain status moves, notably Will-O-Wisp from Talonflame and Paldean Tauros-F as well as Toxic from Quagsire. It also provides it Tyranitar with protection against priority moves from Scizor and Slither Wing to remove the need to Terastallize versus them. Taunt can be used over Substitute to shut down defensive pokemon Pokemon that would otherwise prevent Tyranitar from sweeping such as Roar Hippowdon (RC) while still beating Quagsire. Tera Flying allows Tyranitar to beat beats Quagsire and, if running Taunt, Hippowdon (RC) while removing its weakness to priority based revenge killers priority users such as Slither Wing and Scizor. It can also let it Tyranitar gain potential set up setup opportunities and generate 50-50s mind games versus Pokemon like Decidueye, Gastrodon, (add comma) and Pawmot. A Jolly nature ensures Tyranitar can outspeed Gengar, Pawmot, and Sandy Shocks at +1.

Dragon Dance Tyranitar can fit fits on a variety of teams, (AC) which can range from Hyper Offense to Semi-Stall hyper offense to semi-stall. It generally struggles to make progress against bulky Ground-types, (AC) as Hippowdon can force it out with Roar or threaten it with Stone Edge, (AC) while Quagsire can PP stall it if healthy. Since Iron Defense + Body Press (add spaces between the moves and the + sign) Slowbro is also a problem for it, Tyranitar appreciates support from Grass-types such as Decideueye Decidueye or and Rotom-C. Rotom-C and Decidueye can also bring Tyranitar in on Pokemon such as Noivern and Salamence for set up setup opportunities. Entry hazard setters such as Sandy Shocks and Gastrodon can help wear down Tyranitar's checks such as Wo-Chien for Tyranitar. Sandy Shocks can also provide Tyranitar with set up setup opportunities against Pokemon like Decideueye Decidueye, (add comma) while Gastrodon can provide a secondary check to Pokemon like Salamence and Gengar to help preserve Tyranitar's HP for it to sweep better. Sandy Shocks can also potentially use Tera Ice to wear down and pressure Rest Talk RestTalk Wo-Chien for Tyranitar. Scream Tail can provide Tyranitar with Wish support to more consistently check such Pokemon (RC) and can deal with Pokemon such as Bulk Up Quaquaval and Paldean Tauros-A Tauros-W that might try to set up against Tyranitar. Wallbreakers such as Paldean Tauros-A Tauros-W and Gengar can wear down checks to Tyranitar like Wo-Chien and Hippowdon. On Hyper Offense hyper offense teams, Dual Screens dual screens setters like Grimmsnarl or Psyterrain Psychic Terrain setters such as Indeedee-M can support Tyranitar with set up setup opportunities or the negation of and negate revenge killers, while Indeedee-M can also provide Healing Wish support.

notes for amcheck

YashGreninja
- Amcheckers don't need to tag the GP Team bot, so no need to worry about that part yet.
- Be careful with subjective changes, particularly single-word ones. As GP, you want to preserve the voice of the writer as much as possible, so their work can be up on site in their own words as much as possible. You want to make sure you're checking what's in the analysis and not what you'd personally write if this was your own analysis; what sounds better to you may not sound better to the writer.
- 'Attempts to sweep using' and 'can sweep by leveraging' are both fine, so there wasn't really a need to make that change. By making it, you've removed the writer's original word choice for wording that you'd personally choose to use.
- The word Choice in Choice-locked should be capitalised because it's referring to Choice items.
- 'x and y' is plural, while 'x or y' is singular. If you're referring to multiple things (teammates, threats, foes etc) then you need to use 'and' in lists of examples to ensure agreement. If you're talking about one thing (a teammate, a threat, a foe etc) then you need to use 'or.' As such, 'Rock-resistant foes such as Tinkaton or Sandy Shocks' needs 'or' to be changed to 'and,' as 'foes' is plural and the list needs to agree with that. The same applies to 'Grass-types such as Decidueye or Rotom-C' - Grass-types is plural so or -> and to agree with that plurality.
- The changes in the Substitute line also aren't really necessary and remove the writer's voice. By removing 'when given free turns' also removes content from the analysis, which GPers should never ever alter. Content has been checked by QC teams before, and if GPers alter it, that means that the content that QC approved and the content after a GP check differ.
- 'It also protects it ' - I changed the second it to Tyranitar to remove ambiguity.
- Commas before 'while' are only needed when it means 'whereas' / is showing contrast. If 'while' is used to mean 'at the same time as' then a comma isn't needed. I removed the comma before while in the Taunt line and the Tera Flying line because 'while' didn't mean 'whereas' there.
- Set up opportunities -> setup opportunities. Setup is the noun (setup sweeper, setup move, setup opportunity), while set up is the verb (to set up, it can set up with Dragon Dance).
- 5050s isn't an approved term, so I just changed it to mind games.
- Commas should always be used before 'which' clauses.
- Commas should be used before 'as' and 'since' if they mean because.
- There's not really a need to change 'such as' to like' because both are functionally the same.
- Commas before 'and' 'but' 'or' are only needed if both clauses / parts of the sentence are independent. If only one clause is independent, the comma is not needed. 'can deal with Pokemon such as Bulk Up Quaquaval and Paldean Tauros-W' isn't an independent clause because it doesn't make sense on its own without the other sentence part, so the comma needs to be remvoed before 'and.'