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Thank you for the feedback, Milak, I followed your advice and tried another one. Is this better?

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Since As Charizard only has a niche on Sun sun teams, Torkoal is a required teammate for Charizard it to function well and Both "function well" and "succeed" mean the same thing, so this is repetition. succed succeed. Torkoal can also provide additional utility to help Charizard, such as removing Rocks Stealth Rock with Rapid Spin and chipping down opponents with Toxic or and Stealth Rocks Rock damage. Venusaur, while which is already the premier sweeper for Sun sun teams, can abuse Charizard's ability to weaken and take out walls such as Mandibuzz and Toxapex. In return, thanks to Chlorophyll, Venusaur can take care of Pokemon that outSpeed outspeed Charizard thanks to Chlorophyll (RC) such as Zeraora. Although Charizard can muscle through Specially Defensive Walls specially defensive walls like Blissey, it's best to accompany it with a physical breaker wallbreaker to take care of them easier more easily, especially if Sun sun isn't active. For example, Darmanitan under sun can 1-KO OHKO them with Flare Blitz under sun, while acting and, with a Choice Scarf, it acts as a general revenge killer with a Choice Scarf Moved so it is clear that a Choice Scarf is needed for it to be a revenge killer, though the amount of recoil it will take takes makes it tough to manage well. Because Charizard's frailty doesn't affect the fact that those Pokemon can do that Charizard's frailty makes it difficult for it to switch inside in, making pivots such as Blissey, Xatu, (AC) or and Clefable that can safely bring it into battle thanks to Teleport useful.
 
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for its teammates to clean in the late-game(AH)
We generally avoid using "in the early/mid/late-game", it doesn't sound very good. Always remove it when you find it and simply leave "late-game" after the verb.
Opting for Knock Off meanallows Zeraora willto be able to cripple Rotom-Heat and
Firs of all, I recommend always separating what you're removing from what you're adding, formatting-wise it's much clearer and simpler to understand. With that said, there wasn't anything particularly wrong with "mean" as a verb here; the author's simply explaining that if you're running Knock Off, you can x, y, and z. "Opting for Knock Off" is the subject of the sentence. If you wanted to change the verb to allow, you'd have to remove "Opting for", because the player can opt for, not Zeraora, and therefore there's a lack of parallelism.
on the other hand Play Rough improves its
Always insert a comma like adverbs of adverbial phrases expressing contrast. In addition, make sure you edits are easy to understand. It's Its -> this is much preferred by authors.
such as Rotom-Heat and Terrakion
You probably missed this, but make sure the spelling is correct: Rotom-H
get Zeraora safely inside the field switch in safely
Again, you're using two verbs with the exact same meaning here. "To get [a Pokemon] in safely" would've probably been the better option here. Or, if you really wanted to use the verb "switch in", you should've removed "get"; -> "help Zeraora switch in safely".
enjoy Zeraora's presence
yeah, this is not very clear either. In this case, it's always better to leave a note explaining what exactly you did change, as most authors won't know about the difference between apostrophes, and if you don't explain it clearly they might just use them again.
problematic for Zeraora, therefore,(AC)
Like I said, when a sentence begins with adverbs like "therefore", "nevertheless", "however", and so on, there must be a more solid punctuation mark before the sentence; in this case, a semicolon would've been the best choice.
defensive switches like Seismitoad and Gastrodon
"Switches" is indeed a noun, but it indicates an undefined n. of Pokemon that are forced out of the field by a certain Pokemon. In this case, what you're looking for is "Switch-ins" -> Pokemon that almost always can come in on a certain foe.

Since As Charizard only has a niche on Sun sun teams
Since and As are interchangeable here, no point in replacing it.
Torkoal is a required teammate for Charizard it
I understand why you might think Charizard is redundant here, but always make sure that our audience needs to have a clear reading experience, so by leaving Charizard you remove the ambiguity as to who "it" might refer to.
an abuse Charizard's ability to weaken and take out walls
Always make sure "abuse" is never used as a verb. "Take advantage of" and "exploit" can both be good options.
 

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Choice Specs Deciudeye is one of the most devastating wallbreakers in Never Used NU. Only Skuntank and Sap Sipper Miltank resists or are immune to Decidueye's STAB combinations, and the former cannot reliably switch into multiple Leaf Storms. Additionally, Leaf Storm and Shadow Ball have excellent synergy, the former nails Dark-types like Silvally-dSilvally-dark Silvally-Dark and Alolan Persian-A, while the latter hits Steel- (AH) and Poison-types like Silvally-Steel, Ferroseed, (AC) and Gardobor Garbodor Gardobor sounds like a meme, as well as Rotom-fan Rotom-S. Hurricane compliments these two moves good (RC) nicely by providing coverage for Sap Sipper Miltank and chunking This feels weird and informal but idk what to replace it with Eldegoss for more damage than Shadow Ball. Although U-Turn U-turn is preferred, so Decidueye can abuse make use of the switches it forces, Roost enables it to take advantage on of its Ddefensive utility more frequently. Giga Drain is also an option that offers recovery while being less exploitable then than Roost.

Nasty Plot Cofagrigus takes a much more offense offensive approach to the Pokémon Pokemon, taking advantage of NU's lack of a sturdy Ghost-types (AH) checks by buffing its Shadow Ball to dangerous levels. Additionally, this set maintains the usefulness of Cofagrigus's Ghost-typing, taking advantage of Choice item (RH) foes like Toxicroak and Indeedee to gain chances to setup. Something that may immediately stand out to you is this set's last move slot moveslot. Despite this set being based around boosting Cofagrigus's Special Attack, Body Press is oftentimes the preferred coverage, because it hits Ghost-resists and Pokemon with a Ghost immunity like Silvally-Dark (AH), Skuntank, and Indeedee-F harder than any of Cofagrigus's possible non-boosted special coverage moves would, although Energy Ball is a great alternative that also smacks Quagsire. Cofagrigus even has the option of dropping Trick Room and running both Body Press and Energy Ball, giving it a phenomenal stall matchup at the cost of its matchup against offense teams. If you choose to do this, make sure to maximise Cofagrigus's Speed IVs and invest enough evEVs in speed Speed to outpace Clefairy.
 
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NP Nasty Plot Cofagrigus takes a much more offense offensive approach to the Pokémon, taking advantage of NU's lack of sturdy Ghost-types checks by buffing its Shadow Ball (i feel like saying "special attack" over a particular move name would be far more appropriate, but i am not informed on the nu meta and it might actually be ideal to spam one move) to dangerous levels. Additionally, this set maintains the usefulness of Cofagrigus's Ghost-typing, taking advantage of exploiting Choice-item foes like Toxicroak and Indeedee to gain chances to set(AS)up. Something that may immediately stand out to you is this the set's last move slot. Despite this set being based around boosting Cofagrigus's SpAtk Special Attack, Body Press is oftentimes the preferred a good choice for (i dont think a preferential fits here? could be wrong) coverage, because it hits Ghost-resists and immunities immunes like Silvally-Dark, Skuntank, and Indeedee-F(AC) harder than any of Cofagrigus's possible non-boosted special coverage moves would, although Energy Ball is a great alternative that also smacks deals with (the language here sets something off) Quagsire. Cofagrigus even has the option of dropping forgoing Trick Room and to running run both Body Press and Energy Ball, giving it a phenomenal stall matchup (i am not sure how to replace matchup here, but i know its wrong :c) at the cost of its matchup presence against offense teams. If you choose to do this, make sure to maximise maximize Cofagrigus's Speed IVs and invest enough evs EVs in speed Speed to outpace Clefairy.
 

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clean in the late-game(AH).
we try to avoid the "in the" before early/mid/late-game, so you can simply remove that and keep only the verb before.
Opting for Knock Off meanallows Zeraora willto be
You could remove the "Opting for(...)" here since it doesn't add much to the sentence, but not a big deal. Important note though: always separate your changes. "Knock Off meanallows" is a lot harder to read than "Knock Off means allows".
to be able to cripple Rotom-Heat
"to be able to cripple" should be removed since it makes the sentence tiring and weird to read. "X move cripples Y Pokémon" is fine.
on the other hand Play Rough
a comma should come before "Play Rough".
formatting like this would probably confuse the writer. by bolding the whole word and replacing it with a new one, it makes the intent a lot clearer, like this: "it's its" or by just pointing out they should remove the apostrophe.
safely inside the field switch in safely
"safely into the field" works just fine here, and keeps most of the sentence intact.
Speaking of Hippowdon and Seismitoad,
This is fluff and adds nothing to the sentence, can and should be removed always.
Rotom-Heat.
Rotom-H, not Rotom-Heat
Also, Rotom-H
the "Also,(...)" is fluff, and works similarly to "Lastly,(...)". These parts of the sentence aren't needed and make it less objective.
defensive switches like Seismitoad and Gastrodon
"switch-ins" not "switches".
 

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Barrasekwda Barraskewda make for a decent late-game (AH) sweeper on Rain rain teams thanks to its amazing speed tier and Swift Swim, (AC) allowing it to outspeed the entire metagame, as well as its great Atk Attack. Liquidation allows Barraskewda to 2hit-KO 2HKO defensive Pokemon like Corviknight and Clefable under rain. Close Combat allows it to 2hit-KO 2HKO Ferrothorn and RotomWash Rotom-W, (AC) as well as safely 1KO outspeed and OHKO Cloyster thanks to Swift Swim. (AP) However, it must be careful against Ferrothorn, as Power Whip or Knock Off will cripple your chances of cleanupping cleaning up. Psychic Fangs helps Barraskewda pressure Toxapex and Kommo-o, though you it never use "you" in the analysis must be cautious of a burn from Scald when facing Toxapex. Aqua Jet is useful to revenge kill Pokemon outside of Rain rain, such as Dugtrio, weakened Zeraora, (AC) and +1 Excadrill. Crunch can be used if specifically targeting Dragapult and Jellicent is more desirable, but the priority from Aqua Jet is often too useful to pass on. An Adamant Nature nature grants Barraskewda a good chance to kill KO Clefable under rain, helps it potentially 2HKO Toxapex, and lets it always 1KO OHKO Sylveon under rain.
 

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Mimikyu fits best on offensive teams that appreciate it’s its ability to set up (RH) easy and clean a weak opposing team in the late-game (AH). These teams also benefits from Disguise enabling Mimikyu to Revenge-Kill revenge kill a key threat at in a pinch. As such, wallbreakers Wallbreakers such as Obstagoon and Lycanroc-Dusk, who can chip or remove checks to Mimikyu such as Skarmory, Weezing-Galar Galarian Weezing, (AC) and def defensive Incineroar are good partners. Lycanroc Dusk Lycanroc-D also can help chip Doublade in range of Mimikyu's attacks and provide extra priority if Mimikyu fails to clean late-game (AH). Due to Mimikyu's low damage output, it appreciates entry hazards to chip opponents such as Jirachi into range of it’s its attacks, potentially preventing them from breaking its Disguise. As such, Stealth Rockers Rock setters such as Krookodile and Terrakion make good partners. Mimikyu also fits well on Webs Sticky Web teams due to the Speed reduction allowing it to remove threats like Terrakion and Keldeo before they can break its Disguise, (AC) as well as being a good check to Noivern on these teams, so Araquanid is a good partner to set the entry hazard Sticky Web. Special Araquanid can also lure and weaken or remove Skarmory, who which is one of Mimikyu's biggest checks.
 

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Tangrowth fit very well on teams like Bulky-Offense bulk offense, balanced, (comma) and stall. These archetypes appreciate Tangrowth's defensive capabilities and the utility it provides. Because of Tangrowth's (ASCII apostrophe) miserable Special Defense, partners who that can take special attackers attacks for it such as Chansey (remove comma) or Celesteela are very appreciated. Chansey can take on Pokemon (no accent) like Primarina and Starmie for Tangrowth and can set Rocks Stealth Rock up. Its ability to wear down common Tangrowth checks such as Rotom-H with Toxic is also very appreciated. Strong Fire- and Ice-type attacks are a problem for Tangrowth, because it is a Grass type and is x2 vulnerable to Fire and Ice Tangrowth is weak to Fire- and Ice-type attacks; (comma to semicolon) therefore, (comma) Water-types partners like Rotom-Wash and Primarina can all both take these strong Fire- (hyphen) and Ice-type attacks and act as checks to threats such as Chandelure and Mamoswine. Primarina also checks Keldeo for Tangrowth. These Water-types appreciate Tangrowth pivotting pivoting directly into (was "in to") Zarude and Tapu Bulu. Rotom-Wash and Tentacurel in particular also work as hazards entry hazard removers for Tangrowht Tangrowth, preventing it from getting too weakened by them. Similarly other removers like Salemence Salamence and Rotom Heat Rotom-H are needed to maximise maximize Tangrowth's potential as a wall. Both also check Scizor for Tangrowth very well. Grounds Ground-types such as Krookodile and Rhyperior like having Tangrowth as a teammate, as it can take on Water-types Pokémon (not really sure if this helps, but I feel it makes sense) such as Azumarill for them. Albeit niche, Incineroar can take on almost any variant of Chandelure, (comma) which Tangrowth greatly appreciates.
 

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Tangrowth fit very well on teams like Bulky-Offense bulk offense, balanced, (comma) and stall.
be careful, Tang is 3rd pers. singular, so it's fits, not fit.
partners who that can take special attackers attacks for it such as Chansey (remove comma) or Celesteela
good, but remember that the main subject is "partners" -> plural. Therefore, you cannot use "or" as a coordinating conjunction, but "and"
Strong Fire- and Ice-type attacks are a problem for Tangrowth, because it is a Grass type and is x2 vulnerable to Fire and Ice Tangrowth is weak to Fire- and Ice-type attacks; (comma to semicolon) therefore, (comma) Water-types partners like Rotom-Wash and Primarina can all both take these strong Fire- (hyphen) and Ice-type attacks and act as checks to threats such as Chandelure and Mamoswine.
Good job here, just make sure you watch out for the very small stuff that tends to be overlooked; in this case it's "Water-types partners" -> you either remove partner or the "s" from -types.
Similarly other removers like
Introductory adverbs like Therefore, Alternatively, However, Nonetheless, Additionally & so on all need to be followed by a comma.

Good job with this!!
 
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Golisopod functions as one of the premier revenge killers within the Rarely Used tier, utilizing its sky-high(AH) attack Attack stat and priority First Impression to threaten common threats like Gardevoir, Virizion,(AC) and Barrasekwda. Liquidation compliments First Impression and handles Bug-type resists like Centiskorch, Coalossol Coalossal,(AC) and Steelix. Knock Off is a non-STAB Dark move that removes item and allows Golisopod to cripple foes like Mantine, Bronzong, and Vaporeon. Golisopod's last slot is splashable and (I don't think splashable makes sense in the sentence and the sentence will be fine without a replacement. Though if you want to replace is I think "is interchangable and" would be better) can be customized to handle threats that the team struggles against. Spikes is preferred for helping Golisopod wear down bulky Walls walls like Dragalge Dragalgae and Bewear which serve as First Impression's switches. Drill Run threatens Steel-(AH) and Poison-types like Toxicroak and Klefki,(AC) whereas Close Combat allows Golispood to hit Porygon-2(RH) and Copperajah hardly as well as improving its matchup against Bewear. Leech Life provides Golisopod with decent recovery, giving it more opportunities to switch in and use First Impression. While Acqua Aqua Jet can be used to revenge-kill(RH) Salazle and Golurk. An alternate spread that has 176 Speed EVs can be used to outspeed Max maximum Speed Copperajah.
 
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Klinklang is an unusual but effective sweeper that excels against conventional offensive teams. Magnet Rise is a Steel move that grants it immunity to Ground-types upon usage and that it allows it to surprise and setup set up on slower staples Pokemon that use Ground-type moves to beat Steel-types like Donphan, Metagross, Nidoqueen and Rhyperior. Other common setup set up fodder includes include Florges, Cresselia without Thunderwave in its moveselot lacking Thunder Wave, and Choice-attackers Choice attackers like Gardevoir, Goodra, and Noivern. A single Shift Gear boost makes Klinklang faster than every Scarfer Choice Scarf user except Noivern,(add comma) and its typing grants resistances to common priorities like priority moves such as (such as is subjective, but i like having more word variety here) First Impression and Ice Shard, so it’s incredibly difficult to offensively check after setting up. Frailer teams are often unable to handle Klinklang's Steel / Electric coverage during the duration of the (pretty unnecessary) late-game as it is only resisted by Electric-types and Water / Ground Water / Ground typings. Balanced teams without such Pokemon can be in trouble too. (unless this segues into another section i feel like it will just utterly confuse the reader)
 

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Klinklang is an unusual but effective sweeper that excels against conventional offensive teams. Magnet Rise is a Steel Steel-type move that grants it a Ground immunity to Ground-types and that it allows allow it to surprise and setup set up on slower Ground-type staples that use Ground-type moves to beat Steel (fluff) like Donphan, Metagross, Nidoquen Nidoqueen, (AC) and Rhyperior. Other common setup fodder includes include Florges, Cresselia without Thunderwave Thunder Wave in its moveselot (fluff), and Choice-attackers Choice Spec users (I assume you're referring to Choice Spec users, if not then substitute with Choice Scarf/Band/item users) like Gardevoir, Goodra, and Noivern. A single Shift Gear boost makes Klinklang faster than every Scarfer Choice Scarf user except Noivern and its typing grants resistance grant it resistances to common priorities priority moves like First Impression and Ice Shard, so it’s incredibly difficult to offensively check after setting up. Frailer teams are often unable to handle Klinklang's Steel / Electric Steel- and Electric-type coverage during the duration of (fluff) the late-game as it is only resisted by Electric-types and Water+Ground typings Water / Ground-types (are Water/Ground-type specifically hard for Klinklang to deal with? If so, maybe explain why. If not, can this be shortened to Electric- and Ground-types?). Balanced teams without such Pokemon resistances can be in trouble struggle against Klinklang too. (fluff; this is implied by the previous sentence even though it specifies frailer teams and doesn't add much to the analysis)

Xatu is fantastic in pivoting into passive opponents like defensive Flygon, Vaporeon, (AC) and Talonflame that relies rely on statuses status effects to inflict significant damage, (AC) and is a true nuisance for entry hazard setters (if possible, try and clarify what type of entry hazard setters: Stealth Rocks, Spikes or Toxic Spikes?) too, including like Copperjah, Mudsdale and Bronzong. Additionally, with Teleport Xatu can guarantee safe entry for both potent breakers (wallbreakers or stallbreakers?) and setuppers set up sweepers (I assume you mean set up sweepers, if not then clarify), as such making it the a staple dual screens setter on HO teams and sets setting it apart from other users of Light Screen and Reflect, (RC) dual screen setters like Espeon. Where Xatu comes short, though, is in its passivity. Despite Teleport helping it keeping keep up momentum, its low offensive powress prowess still causes it to cede turns to potent wallbreakers like Starmie, Tyrantrum, and Guzzlord. Additionally, its poor Defenses defenses make it less effective in directly coming inside the field switching (fluff) into coverage attacks moves (maybe specify what type of coverage moves, eg. Dark- or Rock-type?) from the likes of (fluff) Sirfetch’d and Machamp and force it ,(AC) forcing it to Roost very frequently to stay healthy throughout the duration of (fluff) the battle. Xatu also struggles heavily to prevent in preventing Diancie to set from setting Stealth Rocks, making it much less useful in certain matchups if it lacks Defog.

(Seems like you've labelled the spoiler wrong, the sample is from Cyclohm's analysis)

Cyclohm is a reliable physically defensive physical wall thanks to its great bulk, solid defensive type and use of Slack Off. It can consistently switch into threats like Astrolotl, Zapdos, and Rilaboom, and make use of its impressive coverage to punish almost any (fluff) possible switch switch-ins. Unfortunately, (RC) it can be very hard justifying to justify the use of Cyclohm over Zapdos, which offers a crucial Ground-type immunity and comparable offensive pressure. Volt Switch is great at helping Cyclohm capitalise capitalize of off its ability to force switchins switches and lets it keep up momentum vs against foes like Blissey, Galar-Slowking Galarian Slowking, (AC) and Tyranitar, (AC) which it struggle struggles to threaten but . (add period) Discharge helps it more directly deal with Water-types like Slowking and Toxapex, which can easily take 1 a Volt Switch and recovery heal up with Slack Off and Recover respectively. Cyclohm can opt for Heal Bell instead of Draco Meteor to provide more team support; , (remove semi-colon, AC) but this leaves it very vulnerable to opposing Dragon-types. Heavy-Duty-Boots Heavy-Duty Boots let Cyclohm safely pivot inside onto the field even with several entry hazards over on the field, but alternatively Rocky Helmet synergise very well synergizes well with Cyclohm's ability: (remove colon) Static to punish U-Turn users like Tornadus-T and Rillaboom.
 

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as one of the premier revenge killers within the Rarely Used tier
good catch on the plural, but make sure even small things like that are cut down if possible. "within the Rarely Used tier" -> "in RU", easy no?
Liquidation compliments First Impression
compliments -> to say something nice to someone. What you're looking for here is complements!
Bug-type resists like
this is not the correct way to spell this, Bug-resistant Pokemon is. Keep this in mind for the future!!
like Dragalge Dragalgae
the spelling was correct here
which serve as First Impression's switches.
- always comma before which, non-restrictive clause.
- switches is referred to Pokemon that are forced out by another foe; here, you'd need a word that indicates a Pokemon that can switch into a particular move / Pokemon, which is switch-in.
hit Porygon-2(RH) and Copperajah hardly as well as improving
- "hard" and "hardly" are not interchangeable, they mean two completely different things. What's probably confusing you is the fact that "hard" can be both an adjective & an adverb. In the case of "x moves hits y hard" it's used as an adverb.
- always a comma before "as well as + gerund"
giving it more opportunities to switch in and use First Impression. While Acqua Aqua Jet can be used to revenge-kill(RH) Salazle and Golurk.
A sentence beginning with while can't stand on its own, because it will always be a subordinate even if it's placed at the beginning. In this case, the sentence was supposed to be connected to the previous one, with "while" being used to indicate contrast. "x moves does this, while y move does that".

Magnet Rise is a Steel move that grants it immunity to Ground-types upon usage
agreed with the first change, but the last part didn't need to be that specific. In addition, a move cannot grant immunity to a type as a whole, but to moves of that specific type, so the correct change here should've been "immunity to Ground-type moves".
Ground-type moves to beat Steel-types like Donphan, Metagross, Nidoqueen and Rhyperior.
Refrain from adding content changes, this is not what GP is about.
Other common setup set up fodder
setup is correct, and fodder should be plural, so "other setup fodders include..."
Frailer teams are often unable to handle Klinklang's Steel / Electric coverage
good job so far!! This is very minor: Steel / Electric typing, Steel + Electric coverage.
late-game as it is only resisted by Electric-types and Water / Ground Water / Ground typings.
- always a comma before "as" when it's carrying logical meaning.
- typings strictly refers to the typing of a Pokemon, here the author's talking about Pokemon that can resist Klinklang's coverage, so you'd need to use types.
Balanced teams without such Pokemon can be in trouble too. (unless this segues into another section i feel like it will just utterly confuse the reader)
I don't necessarily agree with this, what the author's basically saying here is "even balanced teams, which tend to be bulkier and more prepared to handle Klinklang, can be in trouble too without such Pokemon", it's pretty clear to me and when making GP checks it's always safe to ask the author or a QC member first before making such important changes!

allows it to break throughg more bulkier
first and foremost, always bold your changes.
furthermore, I'd recommend being as clear as possible when making checks, as you can see here it's not very clear what you removed, and it's always safe to just remove the incorrect word and write the correct spelling after, even if it's just missing a letter.
blocking the latter as a check
blocking isn't rly the correct word here, what the author's implying is that by blocking Trapinch's First Impression you basically make it a sitting duck and no longer a check, something like "invalidating" is def more appropriate!
Impressive job Cell! Keep in mind my suggestions for the future!
 

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Punk Rock Toxtricity's Toxtricity's Punk Rock-boosted Boomburst has obscene base pwoer power and coverage, OHKO-ing (RH) or 2HKing 2HKOing most Pokemon within the Rarely Used RU tier,(AC) and even 3HKOing Steelix and Rhyperior. Overdrive is a consistent Electric-type STAB attack that punishes Pokémon Pokemon that are able to switch into Boomburst, like Stakataka and Diancie. Volt Switch lets Toxtricity bring inside a threatening teammate in against relatively consistent checks like Porygon2 and Registeel. Sludge Bomb can poison bulky switches switch-ins, 2HKOs 2HKOes Alolan Marowak, OHKOs OHKOes Gardevoir with Trace as an ability Trace Gardevoir, and always OHKOes Zarude, whohas which has a 75% chance of living Modest Boomburst. Snarl catches the occasional Golurk, along with OHKOing Alolan Marowak. Toxtricity's speed Speed tier isn't crowded, so it can get away with a Modest nature. Running Timid is advantageous against other Toxtricities Toxtricity, though it makes Pokemon harder to OHKO with Boomburst.
 

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Magnet Rise is a Steel Steel-type move that grants it a Ground immunity to Ground-types and that it allows allow it to surprise and setup set up on slower Ground-type staples that use Ground-type moves to beat Steel (fluff) like Donphan, Metagross, Nidoquen Nidoqueen, (AC) and Rhyperior.
a few things to point out:
- everyone knows that Magnet Rise is a Steel-type move, cutting that part would definitely help a bit -> "Magnet Rise grants..."
- you added an extra information, Ground-type, which is unfortunately incorrect, as Metagross is also mentioned in the list and is obviously a Steel-type, just be careful when adding subjective stuff, it can definitely change more than you can think!
Other common setup fodder includes include Florges, Cresselia without Thunderwave Thunder Wave in its moveselot (fluff), and Choice-attackers Choice Spec users (I assume you're referring to Choice Spec users, if not then substitute with Choice Scarf/Band/item users) like Gardevoir, Goodra, and Noivern.
- the object being listed is plural, so fodders should be used.
- again, another slightly incorrect personal change, the author isn't necessarily implying that all these use Choice Specs, they could also be using Choice Scarf. The term Choice attacker(s) is perfectly accepted, all you needed to do was remove the hyphen.
except Noivern and its typing grants resistance grant it resistances to common priorities priority moves like First Impression and Ice Shard
- these two sentences need to be separated, the subject (and subsequently the theme) changes, so a comma before "and" should be used because "and" is introducing a new clause.
- typing is singular, so you'd need to use 3rd pers. sing. of the verb -> grants
so it’s incredibly difficult to offensively check after setting up
forgot to point this out so I'm gonna also tag tenzhii, but this (’) is a curly apostrophe and should be changed to the regular one ('), these are unfortunately very easy to miss :(
Frailer teams are often unable to handle Klinklang's Steel / Electric Steel- and Electric-type coverage during the duration of (fluff) the late-game as it is only resisted by Electric-types and Water+Ground typings Water / Ground-types
- Steel + Electric coverage is the correct way to spell this
- Whenever any of the 3 phases of the battle is mentioned (early- / mid- / late-game), there's no need to use anything before, like "in the", "during the" & whatnot. "X Pokemon can sweep late-game" ; "Y Pokemon can set Spikes early-game" and so on.
- last part is correct!
Balanced teams without such Pokemon resistances can be in trouble struggle against Klinklang too. (fluff; this is implied by the previous sentence even though it specifies frailer teams and doesn't add much to the analysis)
I'll directly post the same note I left to Tenzhii -> I don't necessarily agree with this, what the author's basically saying here is "even balanced teams, which tend to be bulkier and more prepared to handle Klinklang, can be in trouble too without such Pokemon", it's pretty clear to me and when making GP checks it's always safe to ask the author or a QC member first before making such important changes!
Xatu is fantastic in pivoting into passive opponents like defensive Flygon, Vaporeon, (AC) and Talonflame that relies rely on statuses status effects to inflict significant damage, (AC) and is a true nuisance for entry hazard setters (if possible, try and clarify what type of entry hazard setters: Stealth Rocks, Spikes or Toxic Spikes?) too, including like Copperjah, Mudsdale and Bronzong.
- opponent = opposing player, what you're looking for here is foes, which refers to opposing Pokemon.
- I agree with separating the two sentences even though it's not required, but if you choose to do so you're gonna have to add a subject, otherwise it can't make sense, try reading it on its own, an independent sentence starting with "and is a true nuisance...", who is?
- entry hazard setters is a frequently used umbrella term that doesn't need to be that specific, it's perfectly fine.
Additionally, with Teleport Xatu can guarantee safe entry for both potent breakers (wallbreakers or stallbreakers?) and setuppers set up sweepers
- A comma is needed after Teleport.
- good catch on the "breakers" and great job at not changing it yourself, it's always safe to ask a QC member or the author first to make sure that what you're assuming is correct.
as such making it the a staple dual screens setter on HO teams and sets setting it apart from other users of Light Screen and Reflect, (RC) dual screen setters like Espeon.
"as such" is completely out of place here; it is used as an introductory adverb for an independent clause, is always preceded by either a semicolon or a period, and is not a substitute for "therefore".
"Xatu can't switch into Dark-types like Grimmsnarl; therefore, partners like Hawlucha..."
"Xatu is a really frail Pokemon; as such, partners like Hawlucha..."
This is me doing my best to try to explain the difference between these two, it's not that easy so if you're still confused DM me on Discord lol
from the likes of (fluff) Sirfetch’d and Machamp
- "the likes of" shouldn't be removed, otherwise you're implying that the only two Pokemon that Xatu struggles to switch into are these two, and that is not correct, the author's simply giving two examples.
- Another curly apostrophe here ;-)
,(AC) forcing it to Roost very frequently to stay healthy throughout the duration of (fluff) the battle.
Correct, but we never use moves as verbs, they should always be preceded by something like "use" or "fire off" in the case of more powerful moves
Xatu also struggles heavily to prevent in preventing Diancie to set from setting Stealth Rocks
- "to struggle with", that's the correct preposition
- Stealth Rock, not Rocks
solid defensive type and use of Slack Off
serial commas, watch out for these, a comma is needed before "and"!
It can consistently switch into threats like Astrolotl, Zapdos, and Rilaboom, and make use of its impressive coverage to punish almost any (fluff) possible switch switch-ins
- again, same thing, if you want to keep the two sentences separated by a comma, you're gonna have to reiterate the subject in the second one, otherwise it won't make sense. Alternatively, removing the comma would also be perfectly fine here!
- "almost any" isn't really fluff, this part of the analysis is meant to showcase the Pokemon's traits, and the author's emphasizing the fact that its coverage can punish a lot of switch-ins, these are very small changes that may seem to be irrelevant but that actually have a significant impact.
Unfortunately, (RC) it can be very hard justifying to justify the use of Cyclohm over Zapdos, which offers a crucial Ground-type immunity and comparable offensive pressure.
- A comma is indeed needed after "Unfortunately"!
- No need to add "-type" when talking about immunities, Ground immunity is perfectly accepted.
helping Cyclohm capitalise capitalize of off
- important thing: when making changes, make sure you follow a specific order. Remove everything first, and then add your corrections (and potential comments if you need to justify your changes). In addition, the correct preposition here is "on", so it would be capitalise of capitalize on
heal up with Slack Off and Recover respectively
A comma is needed before respectively!
Heavy-Duty Boots let Cyclohm safely pivot inside onto the field even with several entry hazards over on the field
there's no need to specify the direction of the pivoting, it can be in and out of the field, and the verb can stand on its own without an object
but alternatively Rocky Helmet synergise very well synergizes well with Cyclohm's ability: (remove colon) Static to punish U-Turn users like Tornadus-T and Rillaboom.
- "but" and "alternatively" are pretty much the same thing and sound incredibly redundant when put together. Remember that if you choose to use "alternatively", you're gonna have to add either a semicolon or a colon before it.
- it's U-turn, not U-Turn.
 

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Thanks to its mixed Defenses defenses, Haze, and access to reliable recoveries recovery, Milotic finds itself a niche in OU as a bulky Water-type (add hyphen). Its naturally high special defense Special Defense help it check Pokemon such as Dragapult, Clefable, (AC) and specs Choice Specs Aegislash, and its typing and decent Def Defense allow it to tank hits from Pokemon like Dracovish. Additionally, Marvel Scale allows it to become even more physically bulky when statused, potentially discouraging discourages (this should be common knowledge) the foe to use status opponent from using status-inflicting moves; however, (AC) being inflicted by Toxic isn't adviced advised, since it shortens the number of turns Milotic can stay in. Scald can potentially punish attackers with a burn. (remove period) , (AC) while Dragon Breath gives Milotic the ability to also spread Paralysis paralysis against Pokemon like Dracovish, Dragapult, (AC) or Hydreigon. The combination of Recover + and Haze helps to prevent set-up Pokemon such as Gyarados, Kommo-O Kommo-o, (AC) and Corvikight Corviknight from getting out of hand against Milotic. The given EVs EV spread alongside a Calm Nature nature allows Milotic to avoid being 2HKO'd by Specs a 2HKO from Choice Specs Aegislash after Stealth Rock damage, while still being physically bulky enough to take on Pokemon like Scarf Choice Scarf Dracovish.
 
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Punk Rock Toxtricity's Punk Rock boosted Boomburst has obscene base Base pwoer Power and coverage, OHKO-ing OHKOing or 2HKing 2HKOing most Pokemon within the Rarely Used RarelyUsed tier,(AC)and even 3HKOing Steelix and Rhyperior. Overdrive is a consistent Electric-type STAB that punishes Pokémon Pokemon that are able to switch into Boomburst, like Stakataka and Diancie. Volt Switch lets Toxtricity bring inside in a threatening teammate in against relatively consistent checks like Porygon2 and Registeel. Sludge Bomb can poison bulky switches Switch-ins, 2HKOes Alolan Marowak, OHKOes Trace Gardevoir with Trace as an ability, and always OHKOes Zarude, whohas who has a 75% chance of living Modest Boomburst. Snarl catches the occasional Golurk, along with an OHKO on Alolan Marowak. Toxtricity's speed Speed tier isn't crowded, so it can get away with running a Modest nature. Running Timid is advantageous against other Toxtricities Toxtricity, though it makes certain Pokemon harder to OHKO with Boomburst.
 

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Its naturally high special defense Special Defense help
Special Defense=singular, which means you can't use 3rd pers. plural. Helps is the correct one.
Marvel Scale allows it to become even more physically bulky when statused, potentially discouraging discourages (this should be common knowledge) the foe to use status opponent from using status-inflicting
awesome job on the first part! However, one slight mistake in the use of the word "opponent", which only refers to opposing players, and not Pokemon. Foe was indeed the correct word.
ability to also spread Paralysis paralysis against Pokemon like Dracovish, Dragapult, (AC) or Hydreigon.
the object being listed here is plural, so the conjunction "or" is incorrect here. What you should use is "
helps to prevent set-up Pokemon such as Gyarados
set-up is incorrect spelling, or rather it is in this instance. "Setup" is the correct one, which is a noun indicating the act of setting up. Set-up can be used as adjective, however, indicating a Pokemon that has already set up.
after Stealth Rock damage, while still being physically bulky enough to take on
The comma before "while" here is incorrect, as it's not used to express contrast between two elements or to make a comparison, it simply works as a coordinating conjunction linking two sentences without the need to separate them, as the subject is still "The given EV spread". The only thing that needed to be changed here was the verb after "while", as the EV spread itself can't be physically bulky, Milotic is! This is a typical instance of lack of parallelism, they're very easy to fix because, as you can see from the text itself, the writer uses "allows to" in the main sentence, which would be the correct verb choice.

Very impressed by your work Albatr0ss! Keep it up!


Punk Rock Toxtricity's Punk Rock boosted Boomburst has obscene base Base pwoer Power and coverage, OHKO-ing OHKOing or 2HKing 2HKOing most Pokemon within the Rarely Used RarelyUsed tier,(AC)and even 3HKOing Steelix and Rhyperior.
first of all, remember to always bold your edits! This is good, I'd personally remove the excessive wording of "within the RarelyUsed tier" and simply replace it with "in RU" -> simple and concise. One more thing: a comma is not needed before "and", as it's still part of the subordinate sentence starting with "OHKOing", which is referred to Boomburst.
Overdrive is a consistent Electric-type STAB that punishes Pokémon Pokemon that are able to switch into Boomburst, like Stakataka and Diancie.
Good, but again, "consistent Electric-type STAB" is kinda useless information, everyone knows what the move's type is, what the writers should do is explain what the move does in a competitive scenario.
Sludge Bomb can poison bulky switches Switch-ins, 2HKOes Alolan Marowak, OHKOes Trace Gardevoir with Trace as an ability, and always OHKOes Zarude, whohas who has a 75% chance of living Modest Boomburst.
couple of things:
- switch-ins is never capitalized
- "who" should never be used as a pronoun when referring to Pokemon, always use that/which; in this case, the latter would be the correct choice.
Snarl catches the occasional Golurk, along with an OHKO on Alolan Marowak.
What you should notice here is a verb missing. The comma before "along with" is unnecessary, but you must always insert a new verb after it which is still related to the original subject of the main sentence. In this case, the correct sentence would be "Snarl catches the occasional Golurk along with OHKOing Alolan Marowak."

The rest is good! Good job!!
 

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Tangrowth Is able to fit very well on teams like Bbulky-Ooffense, balanced,(AC) and stall.,(RFS,AC) Tthese archetypes appreciate Tangrowth's Ddefensive capabilities and the utility it provides. However, Bbecause of Tangrowth’s miserable low Special Defencse, partners teammates who can take special attackers for it such as Chansey, or Celesteela are very appreciated. Chansey can take on Pokémon like Primarina and Starmie for Tangrowth and can set up Stealth Rocks up. Its Chansey's ability to wear down common Tangrowth checks such as Rotom-H with Toxic is also very appreciated. Strong Fire- and Ice-type attacks are a problem for Tangrowth, because it is a Grass type and is x2 vulnerable to Fire and Ice, (This sentence isn't necessary since they already mentioned that "Fire- and Ice-types are a problem")therefore Water-types partners teammates like Rotom-Wash and Primarina can all take these strong Fire-(AH) and Ice-type attacks and act as checks to threats such as Chandelure and Mamoswine.,(RFS, AC) Primarina also checks Keldeo which is helpful for Tangrowth. These Water-types appreciate Tangrowth's pivotting directly in to Zarude and Tapu Bulu. Rotom-Wash and Tentacurel in particular also work as hazards removers for Tangrowtht, preventing it from getting too weakened by them. Similarly other removers Defoggers like Salemence and Rotom-(AH)Heat are needed to maximise Tangrowth's potential as a wall tank.,(RFS, AC) Bboth also check Scizor for Tangrowth very well. Grounds-types such as Krookodile and Rhyperior like having Tangrowth as a teammate, as it can take on Water-types Pokémon such as Azumarill for them. Another good teammate to use would be Albeit niche,(RC) (Wanted to word it out nicely)Incineroar,(AC) as it can take on almost any variant of Chandelure which is Tangrowth greatly appreciateds for Tangrowth.


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Xatu is fantastic in at pivoting into passive opponents foes like defensive Flygon, Vaporeon and Talonflame that relies rely on statuses to inflict significant damage and is a true nuisance for entry hazard setters too, including Copperjah, Mudsdale and Bronzong. Additionally, with Teleport,(AC) Xatu can guarantee safe entry for both potent breakers and setuppers setup sweepers, as such making it the staple dual screens setter on HO hyper offense teams and sets it apart from other users of Light Screen and Reflect, screen setters like Espeon. Where Xatu comes short, though, is in its passivity. Despite Teleport helping it keeping up momentum, its low offensive powress prowess still causes it to cede turns to potent wallbreakers like Starmie, Tyrantrum, and Guzzlord. Additionally, its poor Defenses bulk make it less effective in directly coming inside the field into coverage attacks from the likes of Sirfetch’d and Machamp and force it to Roost very frequently to stay healthy throughout the duration of the battle. Xatu also struggles heavily to prevent Diancie to set Stealth Rocks from setting up Stealth Rock, making it much less useful in certain matchups if it lacks Defog.
 
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Amoonguss has rose risen in Uusage since Zygarde's ban and challenges Tangrowth as a Grass-type with Regenerator. It fits wells on bulky offensives teams due to its immunity to Toxic, and enough good special bulk that allows it to run Black Sludge and key resistances to Fairy-, Electric-, and Water-. Its many resistances allow it to switch into many Sspecial Aattackers like Magearna, Tapu Koko and Ash-Greninja-Ash and cripple them with status. Also, Amoonguss can also put to sleep or paralyse paralyze Pokemon like Mega Alakazam and Tornadus-T with Spore or Stun Spore respectively (both of the Pokemon you have mentioned are affected by both Spore and Stun Spore) when they switch into Amoonguss and take at least one of their attacks at high health (switching into a Pokemon implies that they are healthy enough to handle a Pokemon in question, have advantage coming from their typing / ability, or both). Amoonguss can even take on the likes of Kartana and Mega Mawile. However, Amoonguss's lack of damage output hinders its offensive presence,(AC) so offensive (in the standpoint of people who lack familiarity to these Pokemon, it may not be immediately obvious to them that these Pokemon are offensive enough to appreciate the status Amoonguss can inflict) teammates like Mega Mawile, Mega Medicham, Keldeo,(AC) and Kartana can capitalize of on the status ailments it inflicts. Water-types like Rotom-wW and Slowbro-(RH)Mega Slowbro appreciate Amoongus’s resistance to Electric, and Steel-types like Celeestela, Heatran,(AC) and Magearna can cover for its Amoonguss's Psychic-type weakness.

Mimikyu fits best on offensive teams that appreciate its ability to set-(RH)up easily and clean a weak opposing team in the late-game. These Offensive teams also benefits from Disguise enabling Mimikyu to Revenge-Kill revenge kill a key threat at in a pinch. As such, wWallbreakers such as Obstagoon and Lycanroc-Dusk, who that can chip or remove checks to Mimikyu such as Skarmory, Weezing-Galar,(AC) and defensive Incineroar are good partners. (revenge killing a threat helping the revenge killer with its checks are two separate things) Lycanroc- Dusk also can help chip Doublade into a range of Mimikyu's attacks and provide extra priority attack if Mimikyu fails to clean late-game. Due to Mimikyu's its low damage output, it Mimikyu appreciates entry hazards to chip opponents,(AC) such as Jirachi,(AC) into range of its attacks, potentially preventing them from breaking its Disguise. As such, Stealth Rockers users such as Krookodile and Terrakion make good partners. Mimikyu also fits well on Webs Sticky Web teams due to the Speed reduction allowing it to remove threats like Terrakion and Keldeo before they can break its Disguise,(AC) as well as being a good check to Noivern on these teams, so Araquanid is a good partner to set the said entry hazard. Special Araquanid can also lure in and weaken or remove Skarmory, who is one of the Mimikyu's biggest checks.

NP Cofagrigus takes a much more offense approach to the Pokémon Pokemon, taking advantage of NU's lack of sturdy Ghost-(AH)types checks by buffing boosting its Shadow Ball's damage output to dangerous levels. Additionally, this set maintains the usefulness utility of Cofagrigus's Ghost-(RH)typing, taking advantage of Choice-item choice item users foes like Toxicroak and Indeedee to gain chances to setup. Something that may immediately stand out to you is this set's last move(RS)slot. Despite the fact that this set being is based around boosting Cofagrigus's Special Attack, Body Press is oftentimes the preferred coverage move,(RC) because it hits Ghost-resists and immunities Pokemon that resist or are immune to Ghost like Silvally-(AC)Dark, Skuntank, and Indeedee-F harder than any of Cofagrigus's possible non-boosted special coverage moves would, although Energy Ball is a great alternative that also smacks Quagsire. Cofagrigus even has the option of dropping Trick Room and running both Body Press and Energy Ball, giving it a phenomenal stall matchup at the a cost of its matchup against offense teams. If you choose to do this, make sure to maximisze Cofagrigus's Speed IVs and invest enough evEVs in sSpeed to outpace outspeed Clefairy.
 

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Xatu is fantastic in at pivoting into passive opponents foes like defensive Flygon, Vaporeon and Talonflame that relies rely on statuses to inflict significant damage and is a true nuisance for entry hazard setters too, including Copperjah, Mudsdale and Bronzong.
Remember we use oxford comma; should be commas after "vaporeon" and "mudsdale"


Additionally, with Teleport,(AC) Xatu can guarantee safe entry for both potent breakers and setuppers setup sweepers, as such making it the staple dual screens setter on HO hyper offense teams and sets it apart from other users of Light Screen and Reflect, screen setters like Espeon.
"breakers" should be "wallbreakers" to distinguish from stallbreakers

"as such making it" isn't a valid phrase bc "as such" and "..., making it" both mean "because of A, it is B"

To parallel "making", "sets" should be "setting"

"screen setters" has the right idea, but because it is light screen and reflect as opposed to just some presence of screen moves, it should be "dual screens setters"

Despite Teleport helping it keeping up momentum, its low offensive powress prowess still causes it to cede turns to potent wallbreakers like Starmie, Tyrantrum, and Guzzlord.
"helping it keeping" should be "helping it keep". "helping it in keeping" is valid but a bit clunkier

Additionally, its poor Defenses bulk make it less effective in directly coming inside the field into coverage attacks from the likes of Sirfetch’d and Machamp and force it to Roost very frequently to stay healthy throughout the duration of the battle
"Defenses" is indeed wrong, but there's a less obtrusive change in just making the D lowercase.

"in" should be "at", like with your first change in the passage

"inside the field" is awkward / just doesnt work™. "into" the field is the standard one.

Move names shouldn't be verbs: "use Roost" should be what's there

"throughout the duration of the battle" is clunky; "throughout the battle" sacrifices no clarity

Advanced Note™: the point of this sentence is somewhat unclear. Do poor defenses mean Xatu has trouble switching in generally, and Sirfetch'd / Machamp coverage is one specific example? Or do poor defenses make it hard for Xatu to do part of its job, directly switching into Pokemon like Sirfetch'd and Machamp to check them? I'd wager the latter, but not with such confidence that i wouldn't put a note explaining that it is only my best interpretation. Additionally, the sentence is just generally a bit long and breathless as to make it harder to parse. We can retool this sentence to make my predicted meaning more clear and make it nicer without destroying the entire thing.

Additionally, its poor defenses makes it less effective at directly coming into coverage attacks of Pokemon it should check, like Sirfetch'd and Machamp. Poor defenses also force it to use Roost very frequently to stay healthy throughout the battle.

You'll notice i preserved specific phrasing choices like the beginning, "directly coming into coverage attacks", and "Roost very frequently to stay healthy throughout" to preserve voice.

everything else seemed to check out, good stuff there
 

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Punk Rock Toxtricity's Boomburst has obscene base Base pwoer Power and coverage, OHKO-(RH)ing or 2HKOing most Pokemon within the Rarely Used tier in RU and even 3HKOing Steelix and Rhyperior. Overdrive is a consistent Electric-type STAB that punishes Pokémon Pokemon that are able to switch into Boomburst, like Stakataka and Diancie. Volt Switch lets Toxtricity bring inside a threatening teammate in against relatively consistent checks like Porygon2 and Registeel. Sludge Bomb can poison bulky switches switch-ins, 2HKOes Alolan Marowak, OHKOes Gardevoir with Trace as an ability, and always OHKOes Zarude, who(add space)has a 75% chance of living Modest Boomburst. Snarl catches the occasional Golurk, along with OHKOing Alolan Marowak. Toxtricity's speed tier isn't crowded, so it can get away with a Modest nature. Running Timid is advantageous against other Toxtricities in the mirror, though it makes some Pokemon harder to OHKO with Boomburst.
 
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