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Ground-types (AH) such as Landorus therian-T (AH), Garchomp,(AC) and Mega Swampert-mega are a problem for tTapu Koko,(AC) as they are immune to its Electric-type STAB moves,(RC) and can OHKO it with EQ Earthquake,(RC) ;(ASC) however,(AC) they can be killed by eliminated with Dazzling gGleam or HP Hidden Power iIce. Choice Specs lets Tapu koko hit hard, but lock you at the cost of locking it into 1 one move unless you it switches out. In addition,(AC) Pokemon who have with a high Special dDefence like Chansey are also a problem,(AC) because it as they can lives all of it's its attacks. Tapu Koko is very fast,(AC) with 130 a base 130 spe Speed, so making it is hard to revenge-kill (RH) unless you have a scarfer Choice Scarf user.


There are a few options for the Clefable's last moveslot. Flamethrower heavily damages Steel-types(AH),(AC) such as Scizor and Excadrill, while Ice Beam lures in and OHKOes Sspecially Ddefensive Glicsor Gliscor. Psyschock deals more damage to Chansey, as it hits on the other side of the spectrum its physical Defense. Finally, Thunder Wave is a great utility move that cripples many of Clefable's checks, including Talonflame, Scizor and Megagross Mega Metagross (or Metagross, didn't quite understand which was the correct one).


Garchomp has a really good Dragon/Ground-typing (RH) Dragon / Ground typing,(AC) and as well as Rough Skin,(AC) which allows it to damage you when you make contact its opponents when they use contact moves. Fairies Fairy-types can switch-in(RH) to on Garchomp,(AC) since Outrage doesn't eaffect them, but they must be weary of Earthquake. Moreover,(AC) Garchomp can also setup set up Stealth Rocks to slightly weaken the opponents when they switch in. It can run a Ddefensive set, and can also utilise a Z-Earthquake or a Groundium-Z set with SD Swords Dance and an Adamant Nnature, so that making it able to OHKOs things Pokemon like Heatran.
 
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Maximum Aattack investment and an Adamant nNature lets Muk-Alola deal as much damage as possible while max SpD EVs with an AV gives Muk a very respectable amount of sSpecial bulk to check Pokémon such as Chandelure, Latias, or Gengar more effectively. A Brave nNature should be used if running Fire Blast as it doesn't lower it's special attack. Poison Touch gives all of Muk-Alola's contact attacks an additional chance to pPoison opponents.
 
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Maximum aAttack investment and an Adamant Nnature lets Muk-Alolan Muk deal as much damage as possible,[AC] while max Special Defense EVs with an Assault Vest gives Alolan Muk a very respectable amount of Sspecial bulk to check Pokémon such as Chandelure, Latias or,[AC] and Gengar more effectively. A Brave Nnature should be used if Alolan Muk is running Fire Blast,[AC] as it doesn't lower it's special attack. Poison Touch gives all of Muk-Alola'n Muk’s contact attacks an additional chance to Poison opponents.poison foes.

Tsareena works best on Ooffensive teams that appreciate a Pokemon that can break through most Ddefensive cores,[AC] as it is able to 1OHKO Quagsire, and 1HKOs well as Alomomola after RocksStealth Rock damage. Tsareena is relatively slow,[AC] so teammates such as Choice Scarf Infernape, Choice Scarf Hydreigon or,[AC] and Mega Aerodactyl-Mega that can revenge- kill faster threats for Tsareena are useful. Pokemon such as Scizor and Nidoking are good Poison Resistshave a useful Poison resistance that can help Tsareena against the majority of Poison T-types that can freely switch into it. In return, Tsareena can hit Psychic T-types with Knock Off, and help against Water- and Ground T-types for Nidoking. It also appreciates entry hazard support from Stealth Rock users like Cobalion or Swampert, so it can wear down potential checks, can damage Rocks -weak Pokemon like Moltres, and further pressure opponents.
 

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It's best to setup DD Dragon Dance towards the end of the game, when Mega Charizard-X's(RH) checks and counters are out of play or have been weakened enough to be picked off after a boost. Mega Charizard X Charizard-X should set up on a Pokemon that it forces out, such as Mega Scizor and Celebi, or against Electric-types such as Mega Manectric Manectric-Mega and Raikou. Rotom-Wash is an easy target to setup on if it is running HP investment, as it can't 2HKO Mega Charizard-X(RH) with hydro pump, and is stalled out with Roost. Make sure you avoid Thunder Wave from pokemon (Capitalize the P in Pokemon) like Cresselia, Thundurus (which also has Prankster) and Mega-Slowbro (RH) as paralysis paralys cuts Mega Charizard-X's(RH) speed in half, making it suspectible susceptible to a higher amount of revengers KOes.

I thought I would give this a try as I am interested in joining the Grammar-Prose Team, but as I am sure you will be able to notice I need a lot of practice! :P Thanks for reading this!
 
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Mew is an extremely versatile Pokemon because it can learn every TM and HM in the game. Furthermore, Mew is the only Defogger This makes it the only Defogger in the metagame with access to Will-O-Wisp and no Stealth Rock weakness that is not weak to Stealth Rock, which lets it cripple Defiant users such as Bisharp by halving their Attack. Overall, Mew has good offensive and defensive stats (AC) but is not really that its defenses are not outstanding when compared to those of bulkier Psychic-types such as Mega Slowbro, regular Slowbro, and Cresselia. (Mew's offensive stats are described as good, but not applied in its suggested moves or shown to be outclassed. Either "offensive and" should be removed, or this should be elaborated on) Mew also has access (capitalize "Access") to a form of reliable recovery in Soft-Boiled, (RC) which contributes to Mew's its longevity on the field. Synchronize is a useful ability for Mew, because it can can punish punishes status users if they inflict status on Mew. It and can also provide provides utility against Scald burns. However, Mew's typing is subpar, which leaves it very vulnerable to common Bug-, Ghost-, and Dark-types, such as Scizor, Gengar, and Mega Gyarados. Mew It also has four-moveslot syndrome (AC) because it cannot benefit from all of its many move options it learns at once.

The hook emphasizes Mew's versatility, but the overview only seems to promote one set. Consider "Mew can learn every TM and HM in the game, which makes it the only Defogger..."


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Ground (AH) types such as Landorus therian Landorus-T, Garchomp (AC) and Swampert-mega Swampert Mega are a problem for threaten tapu Koko (capitalize "Tapu") (AC) as they are immune to its Electric STAB moves, (RC) and can OHKO it with EQ, (replace comma with period) however (capitalize "However") (AC) they can be killed by (Replace "killed by" with whichever of OHKOed, revenge killed, forced out, etc. is more accurate) Dazzling (capitalize "Gleam") gleam or HP ice Hidden Power Ice. Choice Specs let Tapu koko hit hard, but lock you into 1 move unless you switch out. (This does not seem particularly relevant to a checks and counters section) Pokemon who have with high Special defence Defense like Chansey are also a problem because it lives can withstand all of it's its attacks (and do what in return?). Choice Scarf users (such as?) can revenge kill Tapu Koko despite its very high is very fast with 130 base spe Speed so it is hard to revenge-kill unless you have a scarfer.


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It's best to set(add space)up DD Dragon Dance towards the end of the game late-game, when Mega Charizard-X's Mega Charizard X's checks and counters are out of play have been KOed or have been weakened enough to be picked off KOd after a boost one turn of setup. Charizard-X It should set up on a Pokemon that it forces out, such as Mega Scizor (AC) and Celebi, or against an Electric-types (remove "s" in "types") such as Manectric-Mega Mega Manectric and (AC) Raikou (AC) or. (remove period) Rotom-Wash running HP investment (add period) is an easy target to setup on if it is running HP investment, as The latter notably it can't 2HKO Charizard-X Mega Charizard X with hydro pump (capitalize "Hydro Pump"), (RC) and is stalled out with Roost. Make sure you avoid Thunder Wave from pokemon (capitalize "Pokemon") like Cresselia, Thundurus (which also has Prankster) (AC) and Mega-Slowbro Mega Slowbro (AC) as paralys the Speed drop from paralysis cuts Mega Charizard-X's speed in half, making it makes Mega Charziard X suspectible susceptible to a higher amount of revengers a wider set of revenge killers. Thundurus is especially dangerous, as Prankster lets it paralyze you even if you could outspeed and OHKO it after setup.
 
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It's best to setup DD Dragon Dance towards the end of the game, when Mega Charizard-X's(RH) (the red hyphen is quite difficult to see; better to just respell the name like you do in the next sentence) checks and counters are out of play or have been weakened enough to be picked off after a boost. Mega Charizard X Charizard-X (keep corrections consistent) should set up on a Pokemon that it forces out, such as Mega Scizor and Celebi, or against Electric-types such as Mega Manectric Manectric-Mega and Raikou. Rotom-Wash (Rotom-W) is an easy target to setup on if it is running HP investment, as it can't 2HKO Mega Charizard-X(RH) (another inconsistency) with hydro pump (Hydro Pump), and is stalled out with Roost. Make sure you avoid Thunder Wave from pokemon (Capitalize the P in Pokemon) (just put Pokemon next to pokemon or something) like Cresselia, Thundurus (which also has Prankster) and Mega-Slowbro (RH) as paralysis paralys ('as' must be preceded by a comma when used this way) cuts Mega Charizard-X's(RH) speed (Speed) in half, making it suspectible susceptible to a higher amount of revengers KOes. (proper term to use here is revenge kills. Also, KOs is the plural, while KOes is a verb)

(this paragraph uses 'setup' twice where it should be 'set up;' setup is the adjective, set up is the action)
 
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Mew is an extremely versatile Pokemon because it can learn every TM and HM in the game. Furthermore, Mew is the only Defogger This makes it the only Defogger in the metagame with access to Will-O-Wisp and no Stealth Rock weakness that is not weak to Stealth Rock, which lets it cripple Defiant users such as Bisharp by halving their Attack.
(note that you're slightly changing the meaning of the sentence by replacing 'and no SR weakness' with 'that is not weak to SR'. the latter implies that there are other metagame-relevant defoggers with will-o-wisp, which may or may not be true)

Overall, Mew has good offensive and defensive stats (AC) but is not really that its defenses are not outstanding when compared to those of bulkier Psychic-types such as Mega Slowbro, regular Slowbro, and Cresselia. (Mew's offensive stats are described as good, but not applied in its suggested moves or shown to be outclassed. Either "offensive and" should be removed, or this should be elaborated on) Mew also has access (capitalize "Access") (if i'm capitalizing a word, i like to just put it in and make it blue) to a form of reliable recovery in Soft-Boiled, (RC) which contributes to Mew's its (other pokemon have been mentioned since mew last was, so keeping Mew's is justified) longevity on the field. Synchronize is a useful ability for Mew, because it can can punish punishes status users if they inflict status on Mew. It and can also provide provides (keep additions and removals cleanly separate where reasonable) utility against Scald burns. However, Mew's typing is subpar, which leaves it very vulnerable to common Bug-, Ghost-, and Dark-types, such as Scizor, Gengar, and Mega Gyarados. Mew It also has four-moveslot syndrome (AC) because it cannot benefit from all of its many move options it learns at once. (this is generally considered an incorrect example of 4mss; it can only be called as such if the limited moveslots seriously hinder a pokemon from filling its purpose)

The hook emphasizes Mew's versatility, but the overview only seems to promote one set. Consider "Mew can learn every TM and HM in the game, which makes it the only Defogger..."

Ground (AH) types such as Landorus therian Landorus-T, Garchomp (AC) and Swampert-mega Swampert Mega (make that Mega Swampert) are a problem for threaten tapu Koko (capitalize "Tapu") (AC) as they are immune to its Electric STAB moves, (RC) and can OHKO it with EQ, (replace comma with period) however (capitalize "However") (AC) they can be killed by (Replace "killed by" with whichever of OHKOed, revenge killed, forced out, etc. is more accurate) Dazzling (capitalize "Gleam") gleam or HP ice Hidden Power Ice. Choice Specs let Tapu koko hit hard, but lock you into 1 move unless you switch out. (This does not seem particularly relevant to a checks and counters section)
(this much parenthetical instruction is painful to read. don't be afraid to just stick objective corrections in there)

Pokemon who have with high Special defence Defense like Chansey are also a problem because it lives can withstand all of it's its attacks (and do what in return?). Choice Scarf users (such as?) can revenge kill Tapu Koko despite its very high is very fast with 130 base spe Speed so it is hard to revenge-kill unless you have a scarfer.


It's best to set(add space)up DD Dragon Dance towards the end of the game late-game, when Mega Charizard-X's Mega Charizard X's checks and counters are out of play have been KOed or have been weakened enough to be picked off KOd after a boost one turn of setup. (everything from 'out of play' onward is pretty subjective) Charizard-X It should set up on a Pokemon that it forces out, such as Mega Scizor (AC) and Celebi, or against an Electric-types (remove "s" in "types") such as Manectric-Mega Mega Manectric and (AC) Raikou (AC) or. (remove period) Rotom-Wash running HP investment (add period) (your ambitious change plus messy formatting makes this too hard to follow) is an easy target to setup on if it is running HP investment, as The latter notably it can't 2HKO Charizard-X Mega Charizard X with hydro pump (capitalize "Hydro Pump"), (RC) and is stalled out with Roost. Make sure you avoid Thunder Wave from pokemon (capitalize "Pokemon") like Cresselia, Thundurus (which also has Prankster) (AC) and Mega-Slowbro Mega Slowbro (AC) as paralys the Speed drop from paralysis cuts Mega Charizard-X's speed in half, making it makes Mega Charziard X suspectible susceptible to a higher amount of revengers a wider set of revenge killers. Thundurus is especially dangerous, as Prankster lets it paralyze you even if you could outspeed and OHKO it after setup. ('you' should refer to the reader/battler, not charizard)
 

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It's best to setup DD Dragon Dance towards the end of the game, when Mega Charizard-X's(RH) (the red hyphen is quite difficult to see; better to just respell the name like you do in the next sentence) checks and counters are out of play or have been weakened enough to be picked off after a boost. Mega Charizard X Charizard-X (keep corrections consistent) should set up on a Pokemon that it forces out, such as Mega Scizor and Celebi, or against Electric-types such as Mega Manectric Manectric-Mega and Raikou. Rotom-Wash (Rotom-W) is an easy target to setup on if it is running HP investment, as it can't 2HKO Mega Charizard-X(RH) (another inconsistency) with hydro pump (Hydro Pump), and is stalled out with Roost. Make sure you avoid Thunder Wave from pokemon (Capitalize the P in Pokemon) (just put Pokemon next to pokemon or something) like Cresselia, Thundurus (which also has Prankster) and Mega-Slowbro (RH) as paralysis paralys ('as' must be preceded by a comma when used this way) cuts Mega Charizard-X's(RH) speed (Speed) in half, making it suspectible susceptible to a higher amount of revengers KOes. (proper term to use here is revenge kills. Also, KOs is the plural, while KOes is a verb)

(this paragraph uses 'setup' twice where it should be 'set up;' setup is the adjective, set up is the action)
Hey! Thanks for the answer :) I’ll keep everything in mind, CryoGyro. I’ll do another one today! CryoGyro
 
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Bronzong is able to check a large amount of threats in the tier such as Wall-breakers and Sweepers like Flygon, Mega GlalieGlalie-Mega, Dragalge, Minior,(AC) and Comfey, thanks to its amazing Psychic- and Steel-typing Psychic-/Steel-typing; which grants it 9 resistances and an immunity (I'd say the part after the semicolon is just dex info and not needed). Bronzong's Levitate ability also gives it immunity to what would otherwise be a weakness leaving it with just three weaknesses and its high Defensive stats allows it to check many specially offensiveSpecially-Offensive Pokemon such as Swellow, Gardevoir, Diancie,(AC) and the recently introduced Necrozma. Bronzong is also a solid Stealth Rockersetter of Stealth rocks thanks to itsit's great bulkBulk. A very low Speedspeed stat of 30 both hurts it and helps it, Bronzong as it will almost always be taking a hit before moving, however it also increases the power of its Gyro Ball.
 
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Bronzong is able to check a large amount of threats in the tier such as Wall-breakers and Sweepers like (why remove this? they're incorrectly capitalized but valid info) Flygon, Mega GlalieGlalie-Mega, Dragalge, Minior,(AC) and Comfey, thanks to its amazing Psychic- and Steel-typing (the correct format is Psychic / Steel typing, hyphens are only for single types) Psychic-/Steel-typing; which grants it 9 resistances and an immunity (I'd say the part after the semicolon is just dex info and not needed). Bronzong's Levitate ability also gives it immunity to what would otherwise be a weakness leaving it with just three weaknesses and its high Defensive (decapitalize) stats allows it to check many specially offensiveSpecially-Offensive Pokemon such as Swellow, Gardevoir, Diancie,(AC) and the recently introduced Necrozma. Bronzong is also a solid Stealth Rockersetter of Stealth rocks (should've kept setter) thanks to itsit's (messed up the strikethrough, i don't recommend striking in general, red is clear enough) great bulkBulk. A very low Speedspeed stat of 30 (should keep 'stat') both hurts it and helps it, Bronzong as it ('as' used in this way must be preceded by a comma) will almost always be taking a hit before moving, however it also increases the power of its (should keep 'of) Gyro Ball.
 

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Hello to the Grammar-Prose team again. I am back again to do one of the "Practice Tests" here to see if I have made any improvements from my first visit here. I feel I have made improvements but I feel I am still lacking in some areas, as it is sometimes hard for me to figure out if anything needs to be fixed but that will come with time as I am still new to GPing (close to about a month I think). Anyways I would appreciate a Gper if they could review and give me some more advice I could use to make my GP checks a little better! Thank you! :psyglad:


Ground-types (AH) such as Landorus therian Landorus-T, Garchomp, (AC) and Swampert-mega Mega Swampert are a problem for Tapu Koko, (AC) as they are immune to Electric STAB Electric-type moves, and can OHKO with EQ Earthquake,; (RC)(ASC)however, AC) they can be killed OHKOed by Dazzling Gleam (Capitalize) or HP Hidden Power Ice (Capitalize). Choice Specs lets Tapu koko hit hard, but locks it you into 1 one move unless you it switches out. Pokemon who have high Special defence Defense like Chansey are also a problem because it lives all of it's its attacks. Tapu Koko is very fast with 130 base spe base 130 Speed, (AC) so it is hard to revenge-kill revenge kill (revenge kill is not hyphenated) unless your have opponent has a scarfer Choice Scarf user.
 
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Maximum aAttack investment and an Adamant Nnature lets Muk-Alola deal as much damage as possible while max SpD EVs with an Assault VestI decided Assault Vest would be better for newer users. Perhaps AV isn't too known. gives Muk a very respectable amount of Sspecial bulk to check Pokémon such as Chandelure, Latias,(AC) or Gengar more effectively. A Brave Nnature should be used if you are running Fire Blast as it doesn't lower it's sSpecial aAttack. Poison Touch gives all of Muk-Alola's contact attacks an additional chance to Ppoison opponents.
 

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Maximum aAttack investment and an Adamant Nnature lets Muk-Alola let (subject isn't singular -> investment + nature) Alolan Muk (regional formes always follow this spelling (Alolan/Galarian + Pokemon name) deal as much damage as possible,(AC) while (in this case, "while" is a synonym for "whereas" or "although", therefore indicating contrast. As such, it always needs a comma before) max SpD Maximum Special Defense EVs with an Assault Vest I decided Assault Vest would be better for newer users. Perhaps AV isn't too known. gives give Alolan Muk a very respectable amount of Sspecial bulk to check Pokémon Pokemon (remember to always spell this without the accent) such as Chandelure, Latias,(AC) or and (object being listed is plural) Gengar more effectively. A Brave Nnature should be used if you are running Fire Blast,(AC) (always use a comma before "as" when it doesn't have temporal meaning, but it's a synonym for "because") as it doesn't lower it's (Generally, I'd always avoid correcting apostrophes, capital letters, or hyphens. I simply just mark the entire word in red and proceed to write the correct spelling after, clarity is very important when making GP checks, so, in this case, It's Its would be the more ideal choice) sSpecial aAttack. Poison Touch gives all of Muk-Alola's Alolan Muk's contact attacks an additional chance to Ppoison opponents (opponent = player) its foes.

Ground-types (AH) such as Landorus therian Landorus-T, Garchomp, (AC) and Swampert-mega Mega Swampert are a problem for Tapu Koko, (AC) as they are immune to Electric STAB its Electric-type STAB (while it's true that they are immune to Electric-type moves in general, in this case it's important to underline that they are immune specifically to Tapu Koko's STAB attacks, otherwise you would be slightly changing the content of the text) moves, and they can OHKO it with EQ Earthquake,; (RC)(ASC)however, AC) they can be killed OHKOed by Dazzling Gleam (Capitalize) or HP Hidden Power Ice (Capitalize). Choice Specs lets Tapu koko Koko hit hard, but it locks it you into 1 one move unless you it switches out. Pokemon who have (Never refer to any Pokemon with the pronoun "who", always stick to "that" or "which") with high Special defence Defense like Chansey are also a problem because it lives (Although Chansey is mentioned as an example, the subject is always "Pokemon", therefore plural) they live all of it's its attacks. Tapu Koko is very fast,(AC) with 130 base spe base 130 Speed, (AC) so it is hard to revenge-kill revenge kill (revenge kill is not hyphenated) unless your have opponent has a scarfer Choice Scarf user.


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Tsareena works best on Offensive offensive teams that appreciate a Pokemon that can break through most Defensive defensive cores,(AC) as it is able to 1HKO OHKO both Quagsire,(RC) and 1HKO Alomomola after Rocks Stealth Rock damage. Tsareena is relatively slow,(AC) so teammates such as Choice Scarf Infernape, Choice Scarf Hydreigon or Aerodactyl-Mega Mega Aerodactyl that can revenge-(RH)kill faster threats for Tsareena are useful. Pokemon such as Scizor and Nidoking are good Poison Resists Pokemon that can help Tsareena against the majority of Poison Types Poison-types,(AC) that can freely switchin to it switch into it. In return, Tsareena can hit Psychic Types Psychic-types with Knock Off, and help against Water-AH) and Ground Types Ground-types for Nidoking. It also appreciates hazard support from Rockers Stealth Rock users like Cobalion or Swampert, so it can wear down potential checks, can damage Rocks weak Stealth Rock-weak Pokemon like Moltres,(AC) and further pressure opponents.


Thanks to its great bulk and useful Grass / Steel-(RH)typing,(AC) Ferrothorn is one of the best entry hazard setters in ubers Ubers. It fairs very well against defoggers such as Lati@s Latios and Latias, especially if it runs Toxic. Also, Toxic is Toxic is also useful for to support Arceus formes and Giratina-Origin. Also, with the Ferrothorn's combination of Iron Barbs, Spikes, Leech Seed,(AC) and Toxic,(RC) Ferrothorn can easily wears down opponents for a teammate to clean up later. However, It does have some flaws,(RC)however. Ferrothorn is rendered useless by Taunt, is very slow, and has a nasty x4 4x weakness to Fire.


Garchomp has a really good Dragon/Ground-typing Dragon / Ground typing,(AC) and Rough Skin which allows it to damage you the foe when you make upon contact. Fairies Fairy-types can switch-in to switch into Garchomp since Outrage doesn't effect affect them,(AC) but they must be weary wary of Earthquake. Garchomp can also setup set Stealth Rocks to weaken the opponent when they switch in. It can run a Defensive defensive set, and can also utilise or opt for a Z-Earthquake set with SD Swords Dance and an Adamant Nature nature, so that it OHKOs things enabling it to OHKO Pokemon like Heatran.
 

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so teammates such as Choice Scarf Infernape, Choice Scarf Hydreigon or and (be careful with these, the subject being listed is plural ("teammates") Aerodactyl-Mega Mega Aerodactyl
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Pokemon such as Poison-immune and -resistant Pokemon such as Scizor and Nidoking are good Poison Resists Pokemon that partners ,(AC) as they can help Tsareena against the majority of Poison Types Poison-types,(AC) (no need to add a comma here, the sentence doesn't need to be separated, as "that" refers only to the Poison-types and is always used in a restrictive sense) that can freely switchin to it switch into it.
While you might think, "Wow Milak, you've changed a lot!", sometimes sentences need to be completely reconstructed in order to convey the idea as clearly as possible; in this case, removing the "Pokemon such as" isn't always correct, there are exceptions, of course, but for now stick with the idea of always keeping them, because the author wouldn't want to specifically mention those two, but only to list them as examples of Pokemon with those distinct traits.
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Tsareena can hit Psychic Types Psychic-types with Knock Off, and it can help against Water-AH) and Ground Types Ground-types for Nidoking.
The second sentence doesn't necessarily have to be an independent clause, always remember to pay attention to how it reads and see if it would be best to add a comma to separate them for more clarity. If you want to add a comma to separate the two clauses, then you should always add the subject and, in this case, the modal verb too.
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It also appreciates entry hazard support from Rockers Stealth Rock users like Cobalion or and (same thing as before) Swampert,(RC) so it can wear down potential checks [...]
A comma should be placed before "So" if it's used as a coordinating conjunction. "Pikachu is weak to Ground-type moves, so partners like Skarmory can help [...]". In this case, "so" is used with the meaning "so that", which is a subordinating conjunction and therefore needs no comma before.

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It fairs fares very well against defoggers such as Lati@s Latios and Latias
"Fair" is an adjective with multiple meanings ("fair complexion", "pretty", "impartial") or a noun and synonym for "festival". Be careful with these, "Fare" is a verb meaning "to work well (against)"
Ferrothorn's combination of Iron Barbs, Spikes, Leech Seed,(AC) and Toxic,(RC) Ferrothorn can easily wears down opponents foes for a teammate to clean up later.
Opponent is always referred to the opposing player. "Foes" should always be used when referring to opposing Pokemon.

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Fairy-types can switch-in to switch into Garchomp,(AC) since Outrage doesn't effect affect them
"Since" can carry both temporal ("it's been two years since we last met") and logical sense; in the latter's case, since can be replaced with "because" and therefore needs a comma before to avoid ambiguity.
Garchomp can also setup set Stealth Rocks to weaken the opponent its foes (same thing) when they switch in.
It can run a Defensive defensive set,(RC) and can also utilise or opt for a Z-Earthquake Groundium Z set with SD Swords Dance and an Adamant Nature nature, so that it OHKOs things enabling it to OHKO Pokemon like Heatran.
- Again, since the second sentence is not an independent clause (there's no subject), you should remove the comma.
- When referring to Z-Moves, you should always use their official names (for example, Tectonic Rage). However, when it is directly referred to a set, it is always best to use the name of the Z-crystal, in this case, Groundium Z.
 

Katy

Banned deucer.
So I'm trying my luck here as well and hope for some feedback - thank you:

RED = Remove
BLUE = Add

Alolan Muk:
Maximum attack investment and an Adamant Nature lets Muk-Alola deal as much damage as possible while max SpD EVs with an AV gives Muk a very respectable amount of Special bulk to check Pokémon such as Chandelure, Latias or Gengar more effectively. A Brave Nature should be used if running Fire Blast as it doesn't lower it's special attack. Poison Touch gives all of Muk-Alola's contact attacks an additional chance to Poison opponents.

Maximum attack investment in its Attack and an Adamant Nnature lets Muk-Alolan Muk deal as much damage as possible, while maximum investment in its Special Defense EVs in conjunction with an Assault Vest gives Alolan Muk a very respectable amount of Sspecial bulk to check Pokéemon such as Chandelure, Latias or, and Gengar more effectively. A Brave Nnature should be used instead if this set is running Fire Blast as it doesn't lower it's sSpecial aAttack. Additionally, its ability in Poison Touch gives all of Muk-Alola'n Muks contact attackmoves an additional chance to Poison opposing Pokemonts.

Tapu Koko:
Ground types such as Landorus therian, Garchomp and Swampert-mega are a problem for tapu Koko as they are immune to Electric STAB, and can OHKO with EQ, however they can be killed by Dazzling gleam or HP ice. Choice Specs let Tapu koko hit hard, but lock you into 1 move unless you switch out. Pokemon who have high Special defence like Chansey are also a problem because it lives all of it's attacks. Tapu Koko is very fast with 130 base spe so it is hard to revenge-kill unless you have a scarfer.

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STAB in Earthquake
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Garchomp:
Garchomp has a really good Dragon/Ground-typing and Rough Skin which allows it to damage you when you make contact. Fairies can switch-in to Garchomp since Outrage doesn't effect them but they must be weary of Earthquake. Garchomp can also setup Stealth Rocks to weaken the opponent when they switch. It can run a Defensive set, and can also utilise a Z-Earthquake set with SD and an Adamant Nature, so that it OHKOs things like Heatran.

Garchomp has a greally goodt typing in Dragon/ and Ground-typ and its ability ing and Rough Skin which allows itGarchomp to damage youfoes, when you makthey use contact moves against it. Fairies cay-type Pokemon are able to switch- into Garchomp sinces STAB attack Outrage as it doesn't effect them, but they must be weary ofcareful of switching into an Earthquake. Furthermore Garchomp can alsis also able to set-up Stealth Rocks to weaken the opponent whensing Pokemon everytime they switch in. It can run a Ddefensive set, and it can also utilisze a Z-Earthquake setSet with Groundium-Z coupled with a Swords Dance and an Adamant Nnature, so that ito OHKOs things like Pokemon such as Heatran.
 
As a general note, you're presenting your changes in a very hard-to-read manner. Putting removals and additions right next to each other with no breathing room, especially within a single word, is too garish to be worth the saved space. I'm guessing you're using that old tool some people like; it can be convenient, but double check the formatting it generates. If you need to change spelling or sentence structure around, just put the old version in red and the new in blue, properly spaced.

Maximum attack investment in its Attack and an Adamant Nnature lets Muk-Alolan Muk
Just capitalizing Attack would have been fine; you introduce more words and a briefly ambiguous 'its' for no real reason. When correcting a capitalization error like Nature here, I like to simply put the corrected word in blue, so it would be "Adamant nature" here. We're not removing anything, just making an adjustment, and now we don't have to deal with an ugly red letter next to 'nature.' A sneaky error you missed here is 'lets'; this sentence has two subjects in 'investment' and 'nature,' so we have to change it to 'let.' My preferred way to correct "Pokemon-Alola" is Alolan Pokemon-Alola; it's a pretty minor difference but looks cleaner and saves you spelling out the Pokemon.

deal as much damage as possible, while maximum investment in its Special Defense EVs in conjunction with an Assault Vest
Changes to punctuation need, need, NEED some sort of extra indication so they're noticeable. Most people do (AC) for 'add comma.' My personal method is to use (comma) and color it approprately, so in this case, "as possible, (comma) while." Saves me having to define acronyms at the start of a check and fits in with the general color rules. Moving on to the EVs part, the only must-change parts are spelling out 'maximum,' 'Special Defense,' and 'Assault Vest.' The rest of the words you added are unnecessary, and considering how much Smogon writers love wordiness already, the fewer you introduce yourself the better. Be especially careful with 'in conjunction' in the future; it's a phrase Smogoners like too much considering how redundant it can be.

Additionally, its ability in Poison Touch gives all of Muk-Alola'n Muks contact attackmoves an additional chance to Poison opposing Pokemonts.
Poison Touch has no bearing on the previous sentences about EVs and natures, so there's no reason to add 'additionally.' There's also no reason to specify that Poison Touch is Muk's ability; we can trust the reader to already know basic concepts like that, especially since it's listed right there on the Smogdex page. You removed a necessary apostrophe from 'Alolan Muk's.' 'Attacks' is no worse than 'moves' here. "an additional chance" is arguably important here, since Muk uses Poison Jab, but this sentence is inherently poor (not your fault) because it's just explaining what Poison Touch objectively does instead of its synergy with Muk's gameplan. That mutation of 'opponents' you do at the end there is taking the cheeky letter inserts way too far.
 
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