UU Doublade [QC 2/2] [GP 1/1]

[Lily]

[SET]
name: Swords Dance
move 1: Swords Dance
move 2: Iron Head
move 3: Shadow Sneak
move 4: Close Combat / Shadow Claw
item: Eviolite
ability: No Guard
nature: Adamant
evs: 212 HP / 252 Atk / 44 Spe

[SET COMMENTS]
Doublade's fantastic typing and good Eviolite-boosted bulk make it a solid check to many top threats, allowing it to switch into foes such as Cobalion and Swords Dance Lucario with ease. In addition, its decent Attack stat, reliable priority in Shadow Sneak and access to Swords Dance allow it to act as a formidable late-game sweeper once its checks, such as Incineroar and offensive Galarian Weezing, are sufficiently weakened. Shadow Sneak also allows Doublade to offensively check weakened Pokemon such as Gardevoir, Chandelure, and Espeon. Close Combat is a good coverage move that allows Doublade to pose a threat to Pokemon that would otherwise switch into it, such as Incineroar and Heliolisk. However, Shadow Claw is also a viable option, giving it a stronger Ghost-type STAB move to aid with breaking through opposing Doublade as well as Psychic-types such as Reuniclus and Celebi. Gyro Ball can be used over Iron Head, as it provides a much stronger hit against Pokemon such as Noivern, Haxorus, and Flygon; if using Gyro Ball, Doublade should use 0 Speed IVs and a Brave nature. However, using Gyro Ball over Iron Head makes it harder for Doublade to check slower Pokemon like Sylveon and Gigalith. 44 Speed EVs allow Doublade to outspeed Rhyperior; these should be moved into HP if Doublade is running Gyro Ball.

Doublade struggles with bulky Water-types like Milotic and Vaporeon, as they can switch into it and threaten it out with Scald or use Haze to remove its boosts, so partners such as Roserade and Rotom-W are good, as they can switch into these Pokemon and threaten them out. Roserade can also set up Spikes to aid Doublade in cleaning up late-game and give Doublade opportunities to set up a Swords Dance with Sleep Powder. In return, Doublade can check strong physical attackers that Roserade would otherwise struggle with like Cobalion. Doublade also appreciates Wish support from Pokemon such as Sylveon and Vaporeon, as it has no way to recover its health on its own. They can also heal status conditions it may receive from Pokemon such as Milotic and Cobalion. Sylveon can also switch into Pokemon such as Incineroar for Doublade, preventing it from having its Eviolite removed by Knock Off. Entry hazard removers such as Noivern and Tsareena are important to pair with Doublade, as its lack of recovery makes it susceptible to getting worn down over the course of a match. Noivern also helps in checking Pokemon such as Roserade, Machamp, and Haxorus that would otherwise cause Doublade problems. Specially defensive Pokemon such as Gigalith and Rhyperior are good partners, as they can pivot into threatening attackers such as Chandelure, Toxtricity, and Noivern that Doublade struggles with. They can also set up Stealth Rock to aid Doublade in sweeping. Incineroar can perform a similar role in checking Chandelure and Escavalier for Doublade, while also using Parting Shot to get Doublade in on Pokemon such as Gigalith. Wallbreakers such as Darmanitan and Machamp are good partners for Doublade, as they can weaken Pokemon that Doublade struggles to beat on its own such as Milotic and Noivern, making it easier to sweep late-game.

[CREDITS]
- Written by: [[Lilburr, 481709]]
- Quality checked by: [[Estarossa, 461329], [Twilight, 344575]]
- Grammar checked by: [[A Cake Wearing A Hat, 388157]]

 

[Gadget]

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[SET]
name: Swords Dance
move 1: Swords Dance
move 2: Iron Head / Gyro Ball (if you keep it)
move 3: Shadow Sneak
move 4: Close Combat / Shadow Claw
item: Eviolite
ability: No Guard
nature: Adamant
evs: 212 HP / 252 Atk / 44 Spe

[SET COMMENTS]
Doublade's fantastic typing and good Eviolite-boosted bulk make it a solid check to many top threats, allowing it to switch into foes such as to check physical threats like Cobalion and Swords Dance Lucario with ease (Not needed, add more examples of things it can come in on). In addition, its decent Attack stat and access to Swords Dance allow it to act as a formidable late-game sweeper, cleaning up weakened teams with ease with its STAB Shadow Sneak. Close Combat is a good coverage move that allows Doublade to pose a threat to Pokemon that would otherwise switch into it, such as Incineroar and Heliolisk (what makes it better then other coverage moves?). However, Shadow Claw is also a viable option, giving it a stronger Ghost-type STAB move to aid with breaking through Reuniclus, Bronzong and Celebi. (Mention some stuff iron head can break, sylveon ect here.) Gyro Ball can be used over Iron Head as it provides a much stronger hit against Pokemon such as Noivern, Haxorus and Flygon; if using Gyro Ball, Doublade should use 0 Speed IVs and a Brave nature. 44 Speed EVs allow Doublade to outspeed Rhyperior; these should be moved into HP if Doublade is running Gyro Ball. (You did not include Gyro ball onto the spread, and it is not accounted for with the suggested spreads. either edit the actual spread or cut the bit about gyro ball)

Despite Doublade's strong offensive presence, it can struggle to break many foes. In particular, Doublade struggles with bulky Water-types like Milotic and Vaporeon, as they can switch into it and threaten it out with Scald or use Haze to remove its boosts or wall Doublade. (explain why knock off hurts it more then most mons)
(Teammates are separate ideas from what walls it. Expanding on what it struggles with, such as knock off should be up at the top.)
Roserade makes for an excellent partner, as it can switch into these Pokemon and threaten them out with its powerful STAB attacks. It can also set up Spikes to aid Doublade in cleaning up late-game, while Doublade can check strong physical attackers that Roserade would otherwise struggle with like Cobalion. Doublade also appreciates cleric support from Pokemon such as Sylveon and Vaporeon, as it has no way to recover its health on its own. Sylveon can also switch into Pokemon such as Incineroar for Doublade, preventing it from having its Eviolite removed by Knock Off. Hazard removers Control such as Noivern and Flygon are important to pair with Doublade, as its lack of recovery makes it susceptible to getting worn down over the course of a match Game. Specially defensive Pokemon such as Gigalith and Rhyperior (another spdef mon here) are good partners, as they can pivot into threatening attackers such as Chandelure and Toxtricity that Doublade struggles with.(mention as part of what doublade struggles with at the top, keep this part in tho.) They Gigalith and Rhyperior can also set up Stealth Rock to ensure that aid Doublade in sweepsing.

[CREDITS]
- Written by: [[Lilburr, 481709]]
- Quality checked by: [[username1, userid1], [username2, userid2]]
- Grammar checked by: [[username1, userid1]]
[[/Edits]]
Good job, I didn't see any glaring flaws, and the grammar was great, my only complaint is that gyro ball isnt accounted for in the spreads but is mentioned by you in the first paragraph, and that you did not provide enough detail as to what doublade struggles with at the top of the second paragraph.

 

[Estarossa]

Going to go over Sanctus Janus's AM check here, comments in purple

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[SET]
name: Swords Dance
move 1: Swords Dance
move 2: Iron Head / Gyro Ball (if you keep it) Bringing this up in QC chat, feel free to implement for now, 2nd QC may ask you to remove
move 3: Shadow Sneak
move 4: Close Combat / Shadow Claw
item: Eviolite
ability: No Guard
nature: Adamant
evs: 212 HP / 252 Atk / 44 Spe

[SET COMMENTS]
Doublade's fantastic typing and good Eviolite-boosted bulk make it a solid check to many top threats, allowing it to switch into foes such as to check physical threats like (unecessary change, specifying that it switches in is very relevant for these two) Cobalion and Swords Dance Lucario with ease (again keep this for same reason) (Not needed, add more examples of things it can come in on). Bring up how it can offensively check weakened threats like Gardevoir and Chandelure with Shadow Sneak here since there's no mention of it in this paragraph. In addition, its decent Attack stat and access to Swords Dance allow it to act as a formidable late-game sweeper, cleaning up weakened teams with ease with its STAB Shadow Sneak. Give a brief comment here along the lines of "once checks like Incineroar and Offensive Galarian Weezing" are removed. Close Combat is a good coverage move that allows Doublade to pose a threat to Pokemon that would otherwise switch into it, such as Incineroar and Heliolisk (what makes it better then other coverage moves?) (not really necessary, this is explained well enough). However, Shadow Claw is also a viable option, giving it a stronger Ghost-type STAB move to aid with breaking through Reuniclus, Bronzong doesn't really do anything to you in return and is set up fodder anyway and Celebi. (Mention some stuff iron head can break, sylveon ect here.) Unecessary to explain the main STAB move here Gyro Ball can be used over Iron Head as it provides a much stronger hit against Pokemon such as Noivern, Haxorus and Flygon; if using Gyro Ball, Doublade should use 0 Speed IVs and a Brave nature. 44 Speed EVs allow Doublade to outspeed Rhyperior; these should be moved into HP if Doublade is running Gyro Ball. (You did not include Gyro ball onto the spread, and it is not accounted for with the suggested spreads. either edit the actual spread or cut the bit about gyro ball) Its fine to include this even as a mention for clarity's sake.

Mention Toxic imo, and briefly comment on how it lets it cripple switch ins like Incineroar / Milotic, comment on its downsides briefly.

Despite Doublade's strong offensive presence, it can struggle to break many foes. In particular, Doublade struggles with bulky Water-types like Milotic and Vaporeon, as they can switch into it and threaten it out with Scald or use Haze to remove its boosts (no this is relevant) or wall Doublade. (explain why knock off hurts it more then most mons) (This has been mentioned lower down in the Sylveon section)
(Teammates are separate ideas from what walls it. Expanding on what it struggles with, such as knock off should be up at the top.)
Roserade makes for an excellent partner, as it can switch into these Pokemon and threaten them out with its powerful STAB attacks. It can also set up Spikes to aid Doublade in cleaning up late-game, while Doublade can check strong physical attackers that Roserade would otherwise struggle with like Cobalion. Doublade also appreciates cleric support from Pokemon such as Sylveon and Vaporeon, as it has no way to recover its health on its own. Sylveon can also switch into Pokemon such as Incineroar for Doublade, preventing it from having its Eviolite removed by Knock Off. Would give a brief mention about how it appreciates Heal Bell support also, allowing it to risk taking Scalds. Hazard removers Control such as Noivern and Flygon are important to pair with Doublade, as its lack of recovery makes it susceptible to getting worn down over the course of a match Game. I'd bring up how they can also support Doublade in checking Pokemon like Roserade and Haxorus that could overwhelm Doublade, and how Noivern can check stuff like Sirfetch'd, Machamp, Escavalier that can be problems for Doublade. Specially defensive Pokemon such as Gigalith and Rhyperior (another spdef mon here) (unecessary) are good partners, as they can pivot into threatening attackers such as Chandelure and Toxtricity Flamethrower Noivern too that Doublade struggles with. (mention as part of what doublade struggles with at the top, keep this part in tho.) no this is fine here They Gigalith and Rhyperior can also set up Stealth Rock to ensure that aid Doublade in sweepsing.

Add a mention of Incineroar for its ability to help check stuff like Chandy and Escav for Doub, and pivot it in on Giga.

Bring up some offensive pivots for doub e.g Washtom and Heliolisk that can help give it opportunities to come in and potentially weaken checks like Incineroar so it can clean late game.

[CREDITS]
- Written by: [[Lilburr, 481709]]
- Quality checked by: [[username1, userid1], [username2, userid2]]
- Grammar checked by: [[username1, userid1]]
[[/Edits]]

Good job, I didn't see any glaring flaws, and the grammar was great, my only complaint is that gyro ball isnt accounted for in the spreads but is mentioned by you in the first paragraph, and that you did not provide enough detail as to what doublade struggles with at the top of the second paragraph.

QC 1/2. Nice work Lilburr.

Sanctus Janus left some comments on your changes here. In general please focus only on content based changes, Grammar changes are usually left until the GP phase of an analysis, as large parts of analyses may well be rewritten during the Quality Control process, and some of your changes ended up changing the meanings of the sentences. To quote Yogi's C&C guide,

Basic things to consider when AM checking an analysis:

1) When starting out with amateur checks (AM checks), you're mainly looking for factually incorrect information inside sections. You shouldn't be changing sets or making clearly subjective changes, as these are for the official checkers to do.

2) Treat AM checking as a way of proving to others that you understand what you're talking about and that you can relay this information in a coherent manner. It may seem as if these checks go unnoticed, but QC does check these when QCing and will use them to consider you for a potential future spot.

3) Don't GP check if you're AM checking, same as with the QC section.

If you have any questions feel free to message me on Discord.

 

[Twilight]

[SET]
name: Swords Dance
move 1: Swords Dance
move 2: Iron Head / Gyro Ball Unslash, keep as move mention
move 3: Shadow Sneak
move 4: Close Combat / Shadow Claw
item: Eviolite
ability: No Guard
nature: Adamant
evs: 212 HP / 252 Atk / 44 Spe

[SET COMMENTS]
Doublade's fantastic typing and good Eviolite-boosted bulk make it a solid check to many top threats, allowing it to switch into foes such as Cobalion and Swords Dance Lucario with ease. In addition, its decent Attack stat, reliable priority in Shadow Sneak, and access to Swords Dance allow it to act as a formidable late-game sweeper, cleaning up weakened teams with ease with its STAB Shadow Sneak This is repetitive because you already state it's a late-game cleaner in the line before, I have moved the Sneak line. once its checks, such as Incineroar and offensive Galarian Weezing, are sufficiently weakened. Shadow Sneak also allows Doublade to offensively check weakened Pokemon such as Gardevoir, Chandelure and Espeon. Close Combat is a good coverage move that allows Doublade to pose a threat to Pokemon that would otherwise switch into it, such as Incineroar and Heliolisk. However, Shadow Claw is also a viable option, giving it a stronger Ghost-type STAB move to aid with breaking through Psychic-types such as Reuniclus and Celebi. Gyro Ball can be used over Iron Head as it provides a much stronger hit against Pokemon such as Noivern, Haxorus and Flygon; if using Gyro Ball, Doublade should use 0 Speed IVs and a Brave nature. However, using Gyro Ball over Iron Head makes it harder for Doublade to check slower Pokemon like Sylveon and Gigalith, though. I feel like this gets straight to the point of why it isn't usually preferred over Iron Head by phrasing it this way. 44 Speed EVs allow Doublade to outspeed Rhyperior; these should be moved into HP if Doublade is running Gyro Ball.

Despite Doublade's strong offensive presence, it can struggle to break many foes. In particular, Doublade struggles with bulky Water-types like Milotic and Vaporeon, as they can switch into it and threaten it out with Scald or use Haze to remove its boosts so partners that can breakthrough them like Rotom-W, Roserade, and Heliolisk are necessary. Roserade makes for an excellent partner, as it can switch into these Pokemon, and threaten them out with its powerful STAB attacks. It can also set up Spikes to aid Doublade in cleaning up late-game and give Doublade opportunities to set up a Swords Dance thanks to Sleep Powder. while In return, Doublade can check strong physical attackers that Roserade would otherwise struggle with like Cobalion. Doublade also appreciates cleric support from Pokemon such as Sylveon and Vaporeon, as it has no way to recover its health on its own. They can also heal status conditions it may receive from Pokemon such as Milotic and Cobalion. Sylveon can also switch into Pokemon such as Incineroar for Doublade, preventing it from having its Eviolite removed by Knock Off. Hazard removers such as Noivern and Flygon I'm not fond of the Flygon mention when it comes to hazard control, I would use another example like Rotom-W or Tsareena here. You'll need to rephrase the next sentence accordingly. are important to pair with Doublade, as its lack of recovery makes it susceptible to getting worn down over the course of a match. They also help to check Pokemon such as Roserade and Haxorus that would otherwise cause Doublade problems. Noivern can also check certain Fighting-types that Doublade struggles with, like Sirfetch'd and Machamp. Specially defensive Pokemon such as Gigalith and Rhyperior are good partners, as they can pivot into threatening attackers such as Chandelure, Toxtricity and Noivern that Doublade struggles with. They can also set up Stealth Rock to aid Doublade in sweeping. Incineroar can perform a similar role in checking check Chandelure and Escavalier Just make this a separate point rather than referencing it doing a similar role to Giga and Rhyp for Doublade, while also using Parting Shot to get Doublade in on Pokemon such as Gigalith. Offensive pivots are also good to pair with Doublade, as it appreciates that they can weaken checks such as Incineroar and Galarian Weezing. Heliolisk and Rotom-W are good partners, as their access to Volt Switch allows them to quickly weaken the opposing team. They also have defensive synergy with Doublade, as Heliolisk provides a Ghost-type immunity and Rotom-W provides a Ground-type immunity. I know you were asked to add this but I'm going to say to just nuke this whole point on offensive pivots as it really isn't that important for Doublade to have a whole point on. I moved these mentions to your first point instead.

Instead, add a point on wallbreakers like Darmanitan etc. that can punch holes through teams for Doub to sweep. This is far more deserving of a point.

[CREDITS]
- Written by: [[Lilburr, 481709]]
- Quality checked by: [[Estarossa, 461329], [username2, userid2]]
- Grammar checked by: [[username1, userid1]]

2/2 when done. Make sure to read over this and cut down where necessary before sending off to GP

 

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[SET]
name: Swords Dance
move 1: Swords Dance
move 2: Iron Head
move 3: Shadow Sneak
move 4: Close Combat / Shadow Claw
item: Eviolite
ability: No Guard
nature: Adamant
evs: 212 HP / 252 Atk / 44 Spe

[SET COMMENTS]
Doublade's fantastic typing and good Eviolite-boosted bulk make it a solid check to many top threats, allowing it to switch into foes such as Cobalion and Swords Dance Lucario with ease. In addition, its decent Attack stat, reliable priority in Shadow Sneak and access to Swords Dance allow it to act as a formidable late-game sweeper once its checks, such as Incineroar and offensive Galarian Weezing, are sufficiently weakened. Shadow Sneak also allows Doublade to offensively check weakened Pokemon such as Gardevoir, Chandelure, (AC, oxford comma is used in smogon) and Espeon. Close Combat is a good coverage move that allows Doublade to pose a threat to Pokemon that would otherwise switch into it, such as Incineroar and Heliolisk. However, Shadow Claw is also a viable option, giving it a stronger Ghost-type STAB move to aid with breaking through opposing Doublade as well as (content change bc qc; that's like one of the real reasons to run claw rn) Psychic-types such as Reuniclus and Celebi. Gyro Ball can be used over Iron Head, (AC) as it provides a much stronger hit against Pokemon such as Noivern, Haxorus, (AC) and Flygon; if using Gyro Ball, Doublade should use 0 Speed IVs and a Brave nature. However, using Gyro Ball over Iron Head makes it harder for Doublade to check slower Pokemon like Sylveon and Gigalith. 44 Speed EVs allow Doublade to outspeed Rhyperior; these should be moved into HP if Doublade is running Gyro Ball.

Doublade struggles with bulky Water-types like Milotic and Vaporeon, as they can switch into it and threaten it out with Scald or use Haze to remove its boosts, so partners such as Roserade and Rotom-W are good, (AC) as they can switch into these Pokemon and threaten them out. Roserade can also set up Spikes to aid Doublade in cleaning up late-game and give Doublade opportunities to set up a Swords Dance with Sleep Powder. In return, Doublade can check strong physical attackers that Roserade would otherwise struggle with like Cobalion. Doublade also appreciates Wish support from Pokemon such as Sylveon and Vaporeon, as it has no way to recover its health on its own. They can also heal status conditions it may receive from Pokemon such as Milotic and Cobalion. Sylveon can also switch into Pokemon such as Incineroar for Doublade, preventing it from having its Eviolite removed by Knock Off. Hazard Entry hazard removers such as Noivern and Tsareena are important to pair with Doublade, as its lack of recovery makes it susceptible to getting worn down over the course of a match. Noivern also helps in checking Pokemon such as Roserade, Machamp, (AC) and Haxorus that would otherwise cause Doublade problems. Specially defensive Pokemon such as Gigalith and Rhyperior are good partners, as they can pivot into threatening attackers such as Chandelure, Toxtricity, (AC) and Noivern that Doublade struggles with. They can also set up Stealth Rock to aid Doublade in sweeping. Incineroar can perform a similar role in checking Chandelure and Escavalier for Doublade, while also using Parting Shot to get Doublade in on Pokemon such as Gigalith. Wallbreakers such as Darmanitan and Machamp are good partners for Doublade, as they can weaken Pokemon that Doublade struggles to beat on its own such as Milotic and Noivern, making it easier to sweep late-game.

[CREDITS]
- Written by: [[Lilburr, 481709]]
- Quality checked by: [[Estarossa, 461329], [Twilight, 344575]]
- Grammar checked by: [[A Cake Wearing A Hat, 388157]]

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you're still a really good writer, don't forget to do oxford commas and comma before as if it means because

 

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